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#1 User is offline   Theresa Icon

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Posted 03 May 2012 - 08:43 PM

Connected

I see a star twinkle
in the jet black winter sky
it reminds me we're connected
You and I

Streaking through the universe
In many shapes and forms
We are cosmic dust
Created to be born

Patterns by billions
yet some how the same
Staring out, riding through
Wondering how we came

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Posted 05 May 2012 - 12:48 AM

"Patterns by billions" - Oh yes indeed! :)

Lovely.

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Posted 05 May 2012 - 05:35 PM

Very lovely indeed Theresa.
Reminded me of the movie Contact.
Carl Sagan would be proud of you. ;)
My most spiritual encounter happened under a jet black winter sky as well.
(so what are we doing down here in Florida?) :blink: :lol:
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Posted 06 May 2012 - 05:07 PM

Good stuff here especially:

'cosmic dust created to be born'
the whisper of a devil is louder than the scream of an angel-

Music with meaning at: http://www.soundclick.com/solide

Lyrics, poetry, screenplays etc. at: http://www.storymani...o...nsR&alpha=E

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Posted 10 May 2012 - 04:34 PM

Ah yes, Theresa ... there-in layeth content asking to be changed from a poem to escape the lips of a singer ...

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Posted 18 May 2012 - 09:29 PM

Makes me feel big and small and the same time! Very nice job.
Love, John Kaniecki

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Posted 18 May 2012 - 10:01 PM

"in the jet black winter sky"

lovely...

perhaps, a trilogy ehh? :huh:

"connected"

"inner connected"

"outer connected"


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