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Life as a Five Year Old

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Posted 26 April 2012 - 11:56 PM

I sort of mess up toward the end, but was wondering what you guys thought of the song. I haven't written piano instrumentals for a while :)

Life as a Five Year Old by Ryan Sy

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Posted 28 April 2012 - 12:23 PM

Some fine playing Ryan and that's one lovely song, perhaps it could be a little slower. Posted Image

Reminds me of Billy Joel "Just The Way You Are" so please take that as a compliment as he is my number one piano player composer period. You might enjoy this guy doing a cover http://www.youtube.c...feature=related
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Posted 28 April 2012 - 09:39 PM

Beautiful playing Ryan and such a happy feeling piece! loved it.
I guess you must have done a few takes? :)

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Posted 29 April 2012 - 02:16 PM

Excellent Ryan. :)
You keep that five year old by your side for the rest of your life and you'll do just fine. ;)

I have one thought about the first phrase that you begin the piece with.
(btw, if you feel that i'm sticking my own sense of music into your business, just tell me to mind my own business)

The melody is a G C D F.
If on the second pass of that theme you were to not play the D (make it a rest) and allow the listener into thinking it is being played.
It would give the piece a bit more tension to release on that F melody note.

I like it alot. I'm hearing a young Dave Grusin in there. :rolleyes:
If you're not familiar with his music, may I suggest you have a listen.

Please do carry on with making beautiful music. :)
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Posted 02 May 2012 - 06:59 AM

If you're doing instrumentals just to do them then this is outstanding. Agree w/slowing it down a bit so the listener isn't racing to keep up. Liked the suggest of a rest on the D.

If you want to pitch this then adding strings would be key as well as REALLY slowing it down. Where would it fit? What show? What series? What type of movie? ok?

Solid man.

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Posted 02 May 2012 - 02:17 PM

Amazing playing, very cheerful sounding.
This is another that could do with the addition of a full production, and I like the idea of a strings addition, as mentioned.
Well done!

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Posted 02 May 2012 - 03:48 PM

Beautiful playing. Id like to listen to a slower version like Gerry said.
The melody is great. Maybe you could benefit from a change at some point in the song by using the accompaniment of the left hand. Sometimes you could stop the left hand, but changing the rythm could also be a good way to relaunch the thing.
> But well, this is good as it is. This is just a thought. Well done!

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Posted 03 May 2012 - 01:39 PM

Thanks for the feedback and kind words, guys!
I'll try slowing it down whenever I perform it. I usually play instrumentals while people are getting seated and whatnot during my gigs :)

And Desertrose - most definitely took a few takes to get this one right ;)

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