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For My Hubby

#1 User is offline   Theresa Icon

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Posted 06 April 2012 - 04:53 PM

Swaying Cypress
Draped in moss
Clear blue skies
White clouds aloft
Out my window
each new day
Is what I see
While here I lay
Healing hands
healed my heart
my God gave me
A brand new start

Theresa Loder

I wrote this for my hubby while he was recouperating from open heart surgery..

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Posted 06 April 2012 - 11:51 PM

Yes, yes from the heart doll. Straight from the heart and the beauty shines through. Thanks for sharing...............peace!
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Posted 08 April 2012 - 07:58 PM

I am sure this beautiful poem with its affirmation of your heart helped his to heal.

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Posted 09 April 2012 - 05:50 PM

Very nice poem indeed. Thanks for sharing :)

regards
R-N-R Jim
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Posted 10 April 2012 - 08:16 AM

Hi Theresa,
How is your husband doing?
If he's getting help from you and God then i have no doubt he is recuperating rather well. :)

While I have to drive down my street to catch a glimpse of the cypress and moss, I look
out each morning on a Jasmine tree right outside my window and even if the windows are closed
I can smell the gentle fragrance given off by those lovely petite white flowers.

Your imagery as well as spirituality is very nice to hear.
Thanks for posting. :)
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Posted 10 April 2012 - 11:11 AM

oxe57, surfer, R-N-R Jim, DannyDep,
Thank you for stopping by my post and commenting. This was written in the
moment. My hubby is doing great now. Five months on his back and just
a month and a half was in a hoyer lift, is now walking down our street every day
and feeling great.

Really appreciate your comments. Yes I remember the jasmine when we lived in Tampa. Wonderful.

Take care
Theresa

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Posted 20 May 2012 - 09:14 PM

You have a brilliant poem here. The first four lines are not true rhymes but they work so well. It flows with a quick paced rhythm. The repition of heal works so well. Normally I hate to use the same word twice but here it nails down the theme of the poem. When you don't rhyme it sets you up for the next rhyme. Kinda like one for you one for me. The poem starts painting pictures opening the imagination to anything then you limit it by outside the window. It speaks volumes of the kindness of God by example and it's not preachy. Finally when you tell me what it was written for I can clearly see everything. You husband is sitting day after day looking out the window at the scenic sights all the while so greatful for the success of the surgery and thanking God for the healing. Love, John Kaniecki

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Posted 21 May 2012 - 08:54 AM

Theresa, :)

it's sooo nice to hear he's recovered...

any man who is loved so much

is doing right by his life

and he deserves to be here...

and you deserve to have him

beautiful sentiments

B)


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