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Swaying Cypress
Draped in moss
Clear blue skies
White clouds aloft
Out my window
each new day
Is what I see
While here I lay
Healing hands
healed my heart
my God gave me
A brand new start
Theresa Loder
I wrote this for my hubby while he was recouperating from open heart surgery..
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oxe57 
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Posted 06 April 2012 - 11:51 PM
Yes, yes from the heart doll. Straight from the heart and the beauty shines through. Thanks for sharing...............peace!
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Posted 09 April 2012 - 05:50 PM
Very nice poem indeed. Thanks for sharing 
regards
R-N-R Jim
regards
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To listen to songs I have written and recorded, go to these links:
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link below is an honorable mention from a national songwriting contest that I entered the song "Baby" that I wrote with the help of singnpeach on vocals and a couple lines for the lyrics she added. Not bad for a muse collaboration.
http://www.songofthe...JamesUpham.html
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Posted 10 April 2012 - 08:16 AM
Hi Theresa,
How is your husband doing?
If he's getting help from you and God then i have no doubt he is recuperating rather well.
While I have to drive down my street to catch a glimpse of the cypress and moss, I look
out each morning on a Jasmine tree right outside my window and even if the windows are closed
I can smell the gentle fragrance given off by those lovely petite white flowers.
Your imagery as well as spirituality is very nice to hear.
Thanks for posting.
How is your husband doing?
If he's getting help from you and God then i have no doubt he is recuperating rather well.
While I have to drive down my street to catch a glimpse of the cypress and moss, I look
out each morning on a Jasmine tree right outside my window and even if the windows are closed
I can smell the gentle fragrance given off by those lovely petite white flowers.
Your imagery as well as spirituality is very nice to hear.
Thanks for posting.
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can only be measured by
the integrity of yourself and the friends
that take the trip with you."
Here are two of my friends,
here is my Soundclick page,
Soundclick webpage
here is my Facebook page,
Facebook webpate
and here is the rest.
My homepage.
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Theresa
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Posted 10 April 2012 - 11:11 AM
oxe57, surfer, R-N-R Jim, DannyDep,
Thank you for stopping by my post and commenting. This was written in the
moment. My hubby is doing great now. Five months on his back and just
a month and a half was in a hoyer lift, is now walking down our street every day
and feeling great.
Really appreciate your comments. Yes I remember the jasmine when we lived in Tampa. Wonderful.
Take care
Theresa
Thank you for stopping by my post and commenting. This was written in the
moment. My hubby is doing great now. Five months on his back and just
a month and a half was in a hoyer lift, is now walking down our street every day
and feeling great.
Really appreciate your comments. Yes I remember the jasmine when we lived in Tampa. Wonderful.
Take care
Theresa
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Posted 20 May 2012 - 09:14 PM
You have a brilliant poem here. The first four lines are not true rhymes but they work so well. It flows with a quick paced rhythm. The repition of heal works so well. Normally I hate to use the same word twice but here it nails down the theme of the poem. When you don't rhyme it sets you up for the next rhyme. Kinda like one for you one for me. The poem starts painting pictures opening the imagination to anything then you limit it by outside the window. It speaks volumes of the kindness of God by example and it's not preachy. Finally when you tell me what it was written for I can clearly see everything. You husband is sitting day after day looking out the window at the scenic sights all the while so greatful for the success of the surgery and thanking God for the healing. Love, John Kaniecki
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