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Rum and a One Night Stand Starts a little slow

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Posted 24 March 2012 - 12:13 PM

Christophe put some great music to my words. We are still working on it though.

Rum and the One Night Stand
© 2012 Cindy Prince

Been so long ago now
The memory’s somewhat blurred
I remember drinking rum
My talking slightly slurred
I remember driving ‘round
His hand on top my knee
We stopped for a little kissing
Beneath a chestnut tree

I should have known it
That rum and me don’t mix
If it hadn’t been for the rum
I’d never been in that fix
If it hadn’t been for that taste
I’d not had a wondering hand
Guess all I can sing about is
Rum and the one night stand

I dare not drink any rum these days
Me and rum had to part our ways

It normally wasn’t like me
Cause I was the girl next door
But that rum, it fooled me
Like I’d never been fooled before
Now when I look back
I have to shake my head
And still this girl next door
Can blush such shades of red

Repeat chorus

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Posted 24 March 2012 - 01:54 PM

This link didn't take me to the song, Cindy

may wanna check it

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Posted 27 March 2012 - 11:18 AM

View Postkimberlyinnc, on 24 March 2012 - 12:54 PM, said:

This link didn't take me to the song, Cindy

may wanna check it


It works for me. Jim-it did for you too?

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Posted 27 March 2012 - 01:58 PM

No. It appears to go to Google (the sign in page for email). I don't think Jim listened at all.
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Posted 30 March 2012 - 09:52 AM

Sorry about that. Not sure why it is like this. It will fix though.

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