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What's It Worth? A question to be answered

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Posted 25 February 2012 - 05:16 PM

What's it worth to us, this world?
This place we hang our warm coats and settle in for the night
Too comfortable for words
While the boiling oceans rage against the shorelines
Washing debris out to sea with foreign insects and dark skinned children

What's it worth to us, this world?
This place that feeds us as we lap up its gravy with our big mouths
Toast our good fortune
While deserts invade fields and forests
Conquering them in places we still taste on our knives and forks

What's it worth to us, this world?
This heaven of heathens, who worship the God of Plenty
The God of Give Me
While the Goddess of Nature is mocked and thrown in prison for treason
Sentenced by the turning of the blind eye and the churning out of cheap stuff

What's it worth to us, this world?
If not our appreciation
If not our attention
If not a global sacrifice
Then what?
We have now sunk to a depth at which re-statement of the obvious is the first duty of intelligent men.
George Orwell

The greatest tragedy in mankind's entire history may be the hijacking of morality by religion.
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Posted 26 February 2012 - 03:52 AM

Wow, yeah. I can so relate to this.
"The God of Give me" - totally!
"Lap up it's gravy with our big mouths" - beautiful.
So many lines in this articulately describe something that I am deeply angry, sad and ashamed of.

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Posted 26 February 2012 - 05:09 PM

I feel your emotion in the piece Jonie.

Iím just wondering if it could be felt even more so if you were to enlighten the listener on some metaphors that were equally as positive
as the ones you create that are the opposite in meaning. :huh:

Describing both extremes of any observation, to me anyway, gives a perspective that opens my soul up to not just the situations,
but to the possible solutions.

What Iím trying to say is that if something feels too unbearable to overcome, it will probably remain too unthinkable to resolve.
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Posted 28 February 2012 - 04:19 AM

Excellent!

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Posted 29 February 2012 - 11:52 AM

lovely :)

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Posted 14 March 2012 - 04:38 PM

Really enjoyed this work. So very relevant. .

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Posted 15 March 2012 - 07:50 AM

There once was a man from Venus
who had a 30-inch . . .

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Posted 17 March 2012 - 09:24 AM

Very cool, David. I like the way your pen flows. :)

Anyone else who may feel inspired to continue this on with their own ideas, please feel free to do so.
We have now sunk to a depth at which re-statement of the obvious is the first duty of intelligent men.
George Orwell

The greatest tragedy in mankind's entire history may be the hijacking of morality by religion.
Arthur C. Clarke

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1 + 1 Song of the Year 2009 Ain't That True

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Posted 17 March 2012 - 08:59 PM

Thanks, Jonie. Though I'm from Earth, my pen is one of my better features.

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