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I Must Inhale

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Posted 28 January 2012 - 03:09 PM

I Must Inhale
All Words By : Stewart Alexander
ò Copyrighted 2011



Calm blue dawn arrives
With sunshine on her skin
My cenotaph writes itself
Everyday within

Taxi cabs and uniforms
Hide my sense of shame
For no-one ever loved me
Or spoke well of me in name

I breathe this morning light and dark
For I sense it to be stale
My days alone with fantasy
For that I must inhale

One purple legion follows me
From cradle to the grave
For my art my music poetry
All bleeds to make me slave

I love the girl in paperback
But that shelf is out of reach
Glass does form from heating sand
That glass one day I'll breach




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Posted 28 January 2012 - 09:28 PM

Beautifully written!

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Posted 29 January 2012 - 02:17 AM

Lot's of nice lines and imagery here, Stew, but I especially like,

"My cenotaph writes itselfEveryday within"
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Posted 29 January 2012 - 12:28 PM

thanks both x


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Posted 29 January 2012 - 07:11 PM

Hi Stewy,
Yep, I'm still breathing too. ;)
And your breath breathes life into your music and art works buddy.
I open my PC's Desktops to your beautiful creations every day.
Peace. :)
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Posted 30 January 2012 - 05:58 PM

Wow this is really nice. One of your best I would say. I love the line "sunshine on her skin". Thanks for sharing...............peace!
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Posted 30 January 2012 - 11:29 PM

View PostDannyDep, on 29 January 2012 - 07:11 PM, said:

Hi Stewy,
Yep, I'm still breathing too. ;) good! :)
And your breath breathes life into your music and art works buddy.
I open my PC's Desktops to your beautiful creations every day.
Peace. :)




thanks old friend...

just finished a painting for a charity event I'm playing live at next Saturday...
so, still keeping my pallet knife busy :)

gonna work on music for this one.. I think it would make a nice song.. :)



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Posted 30 January 2012 - 11:31 PM

View Postoxe57, on 30 January 2012 - 05:58 PM, said:

Wow this is really nice. One of your best I would say. I love the line "sunshine on her skin". Thanks for sharing...............peace!




very kind mate...

nice to be back running this forum.. as I co-created it years ago..
for anyone to post anything.. and express..

I'm glad people still do..


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Posted 05 February 2012 - 01:30 PM

Had to read this again, it really is wonderful.

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Posted 11 February 2012 - 12:53 AM

Stewie,

You write so well that sometimes I just get lost, because I keep staring at your avator...

Anyways, my favorite line was

I love the girl in paperback
But that shelf is out of reach


But wait, I'm not on a book :P I really like the title and underlying theme of having to inhale what you despise, because it's life. This would make a great song (hint hint)


Thanks for sharing :)

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Posted 12 February 2012 - 11:34 AM

thanks Tammy xx always love that you love my stuff... :)


and Klo...

the girls I want are always out of my reach.. sadly... :(

;) chuffed you liked it...


stewie x

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Posted 12 February 2012 - 04:22 PM

Exquisite writing. Beautiful lines and expression. Loved reading it

Take care
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Posted 13 February 2012 - 04:50 PM

It's Great ! Needs to be read and appreciated by the masses ...Excellent dude !
I have been fortunate enough to get a great bite of the Apple of Life. One thing I know for sure. Watch out for the Worms!

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Posted 16 February 2012 - 10:07 PM

View PostTheresa, on 12 February 2012 - 04:22 PM, said:

Exquisite writing. Beautiful lines and expression. Loved reading it

Take care
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you are very sweet :)

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Posted 17 February 2012 - 12:40 AM

Puff puff pass! :mellow:

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Posted 19 February 2012 - 10:05 AM

View PostSoddyBottoms, on 13 February 2012 - 04:50 PM, said:

It's Great ! Needs to be read and appreciated by the masses ...Excellent dude !


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Posted 19 February 2012 - 10:12 AM

View PostFunkDaddy, on 17 February 2012 - 12:40 AM, said:

Puff puff pass! :mellow:

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I love the girl in paperback
But that shelf is out of reach


Love that!




cheers bud..

I am in love with a girl .. sadly she is married .. sums my luck up ;)

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