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Posted 01 September 2011 - 11:37 AM

The September Lyric Contest is now open for entries.

There is no theme or, special requirement, or restrictions this month

Submission Rules:

Standard rules apply (you can read them in full here) but, in short, they are:

- Send your lyric to me (Neal K) by Private Message before the end of Wednesday, September 14 - You must have 25 posts to enter
- Lyrics must not have been posted on the Muse as a lyric or a song.
- No changes to a lyric once it has been submitted

Scoring

When the contest closes, I will provide a list of the lyrics and instructions on how to submit scores.

Scoring will begin on Thursday, September 15 and end midnight on Sunday, September 18. Winners will be posted the following day.

Please do not send any scores until I announce officialy that the contest is closed and that scoring has commenced.

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Posted 01 September 2011 - 04:00 PM

44 Years to Santa Fe

V1
In the Army,
he served in Greece and Turkey,
Kansas and Maryland,
Thailand, Vietnam.

CHORUS
They wrote for 44 years.
But she donít write no more.

V2
When he was home,
they left each other notes,
about bread and milk,
the kids and the dentist.

CHORUS
They wrote for 44 years.
But she donít write no more.

V3
And she was cold
up there in Ohio.
She wanted to go
to New Mexico.

CHORUS
They wrote for 44 years.
But she donít write no more.

V4
After the cancer,
he counted their letters.
Now he counts the miles.
He counts while he drives.

OUTRO
While he drives to Santa Fe.
To Santa Fe to lay flowers on her grave,
flowers on her grave, flowers on her grave.
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 06 September 2011 - 10:56 AM

(The Island of) Felicidar*

V1:
There's an island, not too far from Madeira
Nobody goes there 'cause nobody knows where it's at
A place you can be who you are
The natives call it Felicidar
I'll tell you how to get there
It's not on any map

CHORUS:
Sail beyond the blue horizon
(Then) reach for the brightest star
When you think that you've found Heaven
You're on the island of Felicidar

V2:
I stumbled upon it sailing one Sunday morning
When life had become too confused and complex
An island alive with eucalyptus
Friendly faces and ocean mist
I think to myself
This is as good as it gets

CHORUS

BRIDGE:
It's a dream, more than a place
A state of grace
Shelter from the stormy sea
A harbor to hide you away

V3:
I tell you this 'cause I think you can keep a secret
So keep it close to your heart wherever you are
When you need to escape
Or just need a break
Let out your sails
Head for Felicidar

CHORUS X 2

* Pronounced Feh-lee'-see-dar''
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Posted 06 September 2011 - 02:19 PM

Wishful Thinking

v1
Miguel came home with a purple heart
Maria was waiting true
Boy yells out in the middle of the night
The girl she just donít know

v2
Sissyís all smiles Ďcause Daddyís back
Finally feeling whole
Woman wonít speak of those days no more
I just grab firm and hold

Chorus
You can always come home
The addresses keep changing
You can always come home
The hours keep marching
You can always come home
If wishes were only true

v3
Miguel's gotta fix it on his own
Maria offers more
Boy sails off in a one seat boat
Girl learns quick alone

v4
Sissy sleeps with short-time friends
Plays the heroine well
Woman is mine to have and hold
(but this) knight can't break her shell

Chorus


Bridge
All of the wounded soldiers are smiling now
All of the lonely lovers are content now
Iím tired of blinking for old white lies
I just wish we could be honest and cry

instrumental break

Chorus
You can always come home
The addresses keep changing
You can always come home
The hours keep marching
You can always come home
If wishes were only true
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Posted 07 September 2011 - 10:31 AM

Same, Bad Feelings

[V1]
When you are feeling down, and youíre not feeling pretty,
When nothing goes the way you planned,
Should you become unwound, taken down by this cold city,
Come around, you know Iíll understand.
I will comfort you,
Iíll pull you through,
Iíve had those same, bad feelings, too.

[V2]
No need to be afraid, no need to feel abandoned,
No need to face this world alone,
No need to play their games, I am always your companion,
You donít have to make it on your own.
I will comfort you,
Iíll pull you through,
Iíve had those same, bad feelings, too.

[Br]
When thereís no rhyme and thereís no reason
We need someone we can believe in.
We need a friend whoís on our side Ö
Sometimes Ö
Sometimes.

[V3]
So, when youíre feeling blue and you donít have the answers,
Pick up the phone and Iíll be there.
Somebody let you down, or maybe circumstances
Placed you in your game of solitaire.
I will comfort you,
Iíll pull you through,
Iíve had those same, bad feelings, too.
Iíve had those same, bad feelings, too.
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 08 September 2011 - 10:29 AM

The More Handsome I Get

(Verse)
I was sittin in some po dunk bar
Drinkin liquor from a mason jar
And you come struttin in that old front door
I knew that with sufficient time
And alcohol Iíd make you mine
So drink it up Iíll buy you plenty more

(Verse)
You said your boyfriend ran away
To find true love with his friend Ray
And that you need a man thatís strong and true
Well looking round this train wreck bar
I just may be your lucky star
Quite possibly the best that you can do

(Chorus)
The more you drink
The more handsome I get
Youíre about 3 shooters
From dragging home Brad Pitt
A memory youíre not soon to forget
The more you drink
The more handsome I get.

(Verse)
Well itís getting near to closin time
I was thinking bout my closin line
So I asked if I could dare to walk you home
I may not be no movie star
But here I am and here you are
Just 1 more drink and no one sleeps alone

(Chorus)
The more you drink
The more handsome I get
Youíre about 3 shooters
From dragging home Brad Pitt
A memory youíre not soon to forget
The more you drink
The more handsome I get.

(Bridge)
Oh the white hot passion
On your new kitchenette
Please donít sober up to fast
I havenít finished yet

( Part. Chorus)
A memory youíre not soon to forget
The more you drink
The more handsome I get.
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 09 September 2011 - 10:40 AM

Are You Staying Home (Tonight)?

V1
Got your full blown makeup on
Rollers in your hair
Changed out of a dozen pair of jeans
Getting all decked out again
For girl's night revelry?
Or is that racy wonderbra for me?

Chorus
Are you staying home
Tonight?
A simple yes or no's
All right
I don't mean to be a hound
(But) lately, I can't nail you down
Are you staying home
Tonight?

V2
Skittish as a thoroughbred
In red stiletto heels
Racing through a cloud of French perfume
Your smile is not an answer
A wink is not a clue
S'il vous plaÓt, what do you plan to do?

Chorus

Br
I'm stoking up a fire
Chilling us some wine
But I'll just watch some football
If I'm just wasting time

Chorus
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Posted 09 September 2011 - 10:42 AM

Any Wind

Yes, sheís hot
But sheís a headache
You can take it from one who knows
Sheíll be swayed and so persuaded
By the way the prevailing wind blows
If sheís not in your arms tonight
Well, the devil only knows

No trust, no roots, so she rambles Ďround
For a greener grass that canít be found

(chorus)
And I know you donít want
To take the time to get to know her
But keep a finger in the air
Cuz any wind can blow her

A bit Ďa mystery
Keeps the loving fun
It always keep you coming back for more
Her brand of magic, cold and tragic
In time will have you flat out on the floor
When it suits her sheíll pick you up
But not a second before

Nothing that she feels is ever stable
You should walk away, buddy, if youíre able

(chorus)

(bridge)
Sheíll make you feel like her knight in shining armor
Sheíll make you feel like the apple of her eye
But once she gets caught up in a new wind
Sheíll be as vacant as the dead leaves blowing by

Yes, sheís hot
But when she cools
Youíll never feel a wind cut through so cold
She never lies, Lord, how youíll try
To earn the promise that sheís never sold
When you feel the wind slice through
Donít say that you werenít told

(chorus)
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Posted 09 September 2011 - 10:44 AM

The Streets Of York

V1
I don't think about my past
It's a suitcase I won't open
'Cause I'm afraid of painful memories
But fate has laid a path
And it fills my whole horizon
I can't hear the future
When the past is calling me...

Chorus
To an awkward little girl
Dreaming big for herself
And for all the world
What will I tell her now
About how I let her down
When I meet her 'round the Streets of York

V2
Will she greet me at the door
Or run by with a quick hello
Kicking up dusty ghosts of yesterday
Will she want something more
After meeting her tomorrows
I can't see the future
When the past shows me the way..

Chorus
To an awkward little girl
Dreaming big for herself
And for all the world
What will I tell her now
About how I let her down
When I meet her 'round the Streets of York

Bridge
So many have failed her, but I'm the biggest fraud
Can I stand and face her, when there's nothing to applaud.
She still has needs and dreams but they never left the streets...

Chorus
Of an awkward little girl
Dreaming big for herself
And for all the world
What will I tell her now
About how I let her down
When I meet her 'round the Streets of York

Outro
It broke my heart but I bent down to that little girl
She said she didn't mind that we didn't rock the world
She said that fame brings too much pain
So ordinary's fine
But as she quickly turned away
I saw the teardrops shine
And wound my way back through the Streets of York.
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Posted 12 September 2011 - 11:33 AM

One Step At A Time

I hear you coming up the stairs
two at a time your so keen
Now I'm waiting for the pause
then three knocks is your routine
I'll make you wait a moment or two
before unlocking my door
You smile, say you were "just passing"
and called in like you had before

But before you pass my door
Want you to know for sure

One step at a time, baby
One step at a time
One kiss before midnight, baby
One kiss'll be fine
One wave from the window and I'll
watch you walk down the street
One step at a time

You rush around like there's no tomorrow
are you running out of time?
I've seen you laughing with your friends
is your reputation on the line?
Maybe thereís something wrong
and youíve got only weeks to live
In that case come on and tell me
I'll give all that I can give

But if that's not how it is
If that's not how it is

One step at a time, baby
One step at a time
One kiss before midnight, baby
One kiss'll be fine
One wave from the window and I'll
watch you walk down the street
One step at a time

The clock strikes twelve and I hear the final chime
Resolutions desert me now is that so much a crime?
Your lips insist on breathing life into my skin
Awaking feelings I thought I'd buried deep within
Ohhh but hang on baby

I'm not giving in
I'm not giving in

One step at a time, baby
One step at a time
One kiss before midnight, baby
One kiss'll be fine
One wave from the window and I'll
watch you walk down the street
One step at a time
One step at a time
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Posted 12 September 2011 - 11:36 AM

ďBetter Than I Used To BeĒ

V1
He started off a preacherís only boy
The only time, in his life, he knew joy
But a gun brought his daddy down
On some dirt street in Illinois

V2
He stood scared while he watched his father bleed
Picking up the six-gun that was freed
He aimed to have his vengeance there
But was too young to do the deed

Br
He hung his little head in shame
And cried the tears no one could read

Ch
And while the church bells rung,
And while a choir sungÖ
ÖHe swore, to himself, that heíd be,
ďBetter than I used to beĒ

V3
From the everglades to the desert sands
He turned outlaw, wanted, in the badlands
Some say the demons in his head
Fanned the fury of his hands

Br
Yeah, the last thing Sheriff Dillon saw
Was the blur of his right hand

Ch
And while the church bells rung,
And while a choir sungÖ
...A tattoo on his right hand reads,
ďBetter than I used to be

V4
Itís a mystery thatís still misunderstood
Itís a story of how the bad was turned to good
Where a woman gave her heart to
The man whoíd steal it, if he could

V5
He was an outlaw, hardened by his trade
And the deal with the devil he had made
Some say she bartered her own soul
Others say, itís how she prayed

Br
Some say she was an angel
Explaining why he seemed afraid

Ch
And the church bells rung,
And the choir sungÖ
Öhe promised her, that day, heíd be,
ďBetter than I used to beĒ


V6
He earned the reputation as a thief,
A scoundrel who would lie right through his teeth
But, in that church, a miracle
Had turned over a fresh new leaf

V7
Now, itís said, he disappeared in ole Paris
But, itís whispered that he died in Kentucky
Where itís rumored that his headstone reads,
ďBetter than I used to beĒ
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Posted 12 September 2011 - 11:38 AM

Why

Ch:
How can we forgive when we cannot forget
That day our towers fell
That day our people died
Not knowing, why
V:
September 11th
Armies and nations could not do
What was done on a suicide mission
Shot arrows of fear into the heart of America
But never pierced the American spirit
Ch:
How can we forgive when we cannot forget
That day our towers fell
That day our people died
Not knowing, why
V:
September 11th
They can tale their best shot at us
Sneak up, knock us down then celebrate
Firing bullets for America into the air
Each one carrying a message of hate
Ch:
How can we forgive when we cannot forget
That day our towers fell
That day our people died
Not knowing, why
Br:
Weíll rebuild and go on with our lives
We always do
And take care of unfinished business
Like we always do.
Ch:
How can we forgive when we cannot forget
That day our towers fell
That day our people died
Not knowing, why
Why
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Posted 12 September 2011 - 11:39 AM

Happy

Verse
I didn't do happy, I didn't do smiles
Staring at my shoes, walking round for miles
Every day another shade of blue
Then I saw you and your big brown eyes
I saw your smile and to my surprise
Well, I was smiling too

Chorus
I didn't do happy til I met you
I didn't do sunny til you shone through
Now all the clouds have blown away
Got no sad words left to say
Every day's another happy day

Verse
Now I walk along with a spring in my step
Cause every day's getting better yet
And if I fall I know just what to do
I reach over and I take your hand
And I remember to understand
The world's a better place with me and you

Chorus
I didn't do happy til I met you
I didn't do sunny til you shone through
Now all the clouds have blown away
Got no sad words left to say
Every day's another happy day

Bridge
Now, I don't do sad, I don't do blue
I never look at these old shoes

Chorus
I didn't do happy til I met you
I didn't do sunny til you shone through
Now all the clouds have blown away
Got no sad words left to say
Every day's another happy day

Outtro
A happy day...
A happy day...
A happy day...
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Posted 12 September 2011 - 03:17 PM

When I Lost You

Verse 1
I spin in my mind
Searching for likeness
Seeking a sign
A way out of madness

Verse 2
I juggle my thoughts
Touching each one lightly
Through memories wrought
I realize finally

Chorus
When I lost you I lost everything
I know itís true
Pain is all remembering brings
I lost my groove
When I lost you

Verse 3
Desolation bites
Through nightís dark cover
Sets its fangs tight
Drains the blood of discovery

Verse 4
I cry to the light
For someone to hear me
To render aid in this fight
Help my recovery

Chorus
When I lost you I lost everything
I know itís true
Pain is all remembering brings
I lost my groove
When I lost you

Tag
Yes, I lost my groove
When I lost youÖ
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Posted 13 September 2011 - 10:52 AM

Garbage Man

I work all day at the county dump
Stackiní garbage in the sun
Yeah, I work all day at that olí landfill
The stink and sweat, it ainít no fun

I break my back just to make a hill
Filth and waste up to my ass
You know I bust my back just to build that hill
Toiliní at this thankless task

ĎCause Iím the garbage man
Ainít nobody ever gave a damn
Iím just the garbage man

I spend my nights at the Bar aní Grille
Lookiní for a girl to know
I spend all my nights at that local dive
But I ainít never found me no love

Well, I donít leave Ďtil I drink my fill
Ainít doiní nobody no harm
You know, I donít leave Ďtil Iíve had my fill
ĎCause there ainít nobody at home

ĎCause Iím the garbage man
Ainít nobody ever gave a damn
Iím just the garbage man

Now the winterís here aní there ainít no break
The garbage keeps cominí in
Oh, the wind blows cold aní my bones they ache
But them trucks just keep rolliní in

I work all day at the county dump
Freeziní out in the snow
Yeah, I work all day at that olí landfill
Wondíriní where my life did go

ĎCause Iím the garbage man
Ainít nobody ever gave a damn
Iím just the garbage man

Bury my ass in a mountain of trash
Thatís the way that I wanna go
Just bury my ass under a mountain of trash
Itís the only life that I know

I said just bury my ass
Under a mountain of trash
Thatís the only life that Iíve known
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Posted 13 September 2011 - 01:39 PM

Set Your Pride Aside

V1
Sheís drinkiní shots tonight
Sheís the center of attention
Those big brown eyes are red
I wonder if sheíll listen
Youíre missing her affection
Sheís scouting substitutes
You donít want to lose her
You know what you need to do

Chorus
Bite your tongue say youíre sorry
Better do it in a hurry
Say you misunderstood
Before sheís gone for good
Donít matter if youíre right
Unless you want a fight
When it comes to love, better
Better set your pride aside

V2
Sheís tearing up the dance floor
High heels across your heart
Heís pulling her in closer
Snugger than a winter scarf
Sheís got her arms around him
Sheís got her heart in tow
Donít just sit here watching
Tell her what she wants to know

Chorus

Bridge
Take my advice ole friend
Donít end up where I am
When sheís gone youíll regret it
Every waking minute

Chorus

Tag
When it comes to love
Set your pride
Set your pride
Set your pride aside
Donít matter if youíre right
Set your pride
Set your pride
Set your pride aside
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Posted 14 September 2011 - 11:23 AM

To Dine with Kings and Queens

Supper came from the dumpster
by the burger joint on West Lee
I admit, I was surprised
how tasty scraps could be

Fifteen years in a prison
cut a man for spittin' on me
now, I walk the streets of filth
redemption don't come cheap

Chorus
Lord, I don't wanna die alone
and find my hungry bones
without a name, without a home
in a pauper's grave
Maybe, I'm a foolish man,
but I still believe
I deserve a second chance
to dine with Kings and Queens

Shelter's full again tonight
so, I brace for midnight snow
Someone found my cardboard stash
I have no place to go

Instrumental Bridge

Chorus
Lord, I don't wanna die alone
and find my hungry bones
without a name, without a home
in a pauper's grave
Maybe, I'm a foolish man,
but I still believe
I deserve a second chance
to dine with Kings and Queens

Outtro
I deserve a second chance
to dine with Kings and Queens
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 14 September 2011 - 08:27 PM

CONNECTION

When I bring up the previews
Of what is on today
I often find myself
Trying to find a way

To filter out the problems
Budding up from inside
I want to find a place
That I can run and hide

Looking for a connection
Without a deep reflection
I need to know
Before the show

Does it have a happy ending?
Will it leave me laughing on the floor?
I don't need another drama
About a daughter turned a whore

Will there be acrobatics?
Action scenes to treat the eyes?
Not interested in theatrics
Or watching people cry

Don't need deeper issues
To rattle round my brain
Begging for relief
Before I go insane

Looking for a connection
Without a deep reflection
I need to know
Before the show

Does it have a happy ending?
Will it leave me laughing on the floor?
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 15 September 2011 - 11:23 AM

WOW - 17 entries this month! That's a new record.

Ok, so it's time to sumbit your scores. Simply give each lyric a score between 1 and 10, and submit that score to me via private message.

If you have entered this contest, you are required to vote, but do not score your own lyric.

Scoring ends Midnight, Pacific Standard time, Sunday, September 18.

Winners will be posted sometime the following day.

Here are the titles:

44 Years to Santa Fe
The Island of Felcidar
Wishful Thinking
Same, Bad Feelings
The More Handsome I Get
Are You Staying Home (Tonight)?
Any Wind
The Streets of York
One Step at a Time
Better Than I Used to Be
Why
Happy
When I Lost You
Garbage Man
Set Your Pride Aside
To Dine with Kings and Queens
Connection


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Posted 19 September 2011 - 11:58 AM

WE have our winners in a contest that saw a record number of entries.

1st Place
To Dine with Kings and Queens
Kimberlyinnc

2nd Place
The More Handsome I Get
Joeinjax

Congrats to Kim and Joe... and everyone who entered. Special thanks to SpanishBuddah, our lone non-contestant scorer. Here are all the lyrics, the writer, and the scores:

To Dine with Kings and Queens, Kimberlyinnc: 7 7 6 5 7 7 5 7 7 7 8 6 8 9 8 6 8 5: 123
The More Handsome I Get, Joeinjax: 8 5 6 8 6 7 7 8 5 7 6 9 5 7 8 6 7 7: 122
Happy, Len: 8 8 7 7 6 8 7 7 6 7 5 5 7 5 6 7 8 5: 119
Are You Staying Home (Tonight)?, Jonie: 8 6 4 6 7 6 7 9 6 7 6 6 6 7 7 7 6 5: 116
The Streets of York, Starsinmyeyes: 7 5 3 5 7 8 8 7 6 6 5 6 6 8 6 8 7 5: 113
The Island of Felcidar, Neuroron: 9 5 5 5 8 8 6 6 5 6 5 7 8 6 4 6 7 6: 112
Same, Bad Feelings, Alistair: 7 4 5 5 7 8 9 10 5 6 4 6 5 5 6 5 9 6: 112
Set Your Pride Aside, Dottie: 8 5 4 6 7 6 7 7 6 8 5 5 7 7 5 6 6 6: 111
Any Wind, feegis: 8 5 3 7 6 6 6 6 5 7 4 7 6 7 7 6 6 6: 108
One Step at a Time, AndyLef: 7 5 9 7 6 5 5 7 5 6 4 4 8 6 5 6 7 6: 108
Garbage Man, Gordon: 5 5 4 5 5 5 5 7 6 7 7 8 8 6 5 6 5 5: 104
Connection, RKG: 7 4 6 5 6 6 6 7 6 4 5 5 6 6 6 6 6 6: 103
Better Than I Used to Be, Ironknee: 7 6 7 5 6 7 6 5 6 6 5 5 5 6 4 6 6 5: 103
44 Years to Santa Fe, Maurreen: 7 4 1 4 7 4 6 7 5 5 7 5 6 7 5 6 6 5: 97
When I Lost You, Graybeard: 6 5 2 4 6 6 7 6 5 6 5 4 6 7 5 5 7 5: 97
Wishful Thinking, Nevergoback: 5 4 4 4 6 4 6 6 5 3 4 5 7 6 4 5 5 4: 87
Why, Bernabby: 7 4 1 3 6 4 5 7 5 5 5 4 5 5 4 5 5 4: 84
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Posted 19 September 2011 - 12:32 PM

I get to say congratulations first to Kimberly and Joeinjax, my top pick. Thanks Neal.
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Posted 19 September 2011 - 12:36 PM

Congratulations, Kim! Looking at my scores and looking at your lyric again, I suspect that I underscored your lyric - but it didn't matter in the end :)

My top mark went to JoeinJax (and I guessed it was you, Joe!). It's a good, fun lyric that could make a very good song!

I think I had Len's "Happy", with a couple of others in second spot.

While I had some scored higher than it seems they received on average from other voters, I can't quibble with the results. I found it hard to score (17 entries is a lot to balance out, I found!), and probably found myself having to give some absolute scores that were a little lower than I would have liked to give, purely for that reason.

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Posted 19 September 2011 - 01:02 PM

Congratulations to all - especially the winners. I had "Happy" in 1st; "To Dine with Kings and Queens" in 2nd; followed by a tie between "Are You Staying Home (Tonight)?" and "Better Than I Used to Be" in 3rd.

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Posted 19 September 2011 - 01:25 PM

Hey all......I didn't fair well, at all....but I've always said that you are only as good as others say you are.......I couldn't understand some of the work submitted, but they scored much better than I......congratulations! -Tom
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Posted 19 September 2011 - 02:06 PM

Congratulations to Kim and Joe, and thanks to Neal and Spanish Buddha.

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Posted 19 September 2011 - 02:59 PM

Congratulations Kim, Joe, and Len. Great lyrics!

I had Len's "Happy" tied for 1st with Ron's "Island of Felicidar", Alistair's "Same Bad Feelings" and Tracy's "Streets of York".

Kim's and Joe's, I had in a tie for second place with Ironknee's "Better Than I Used to Be" (don't know why that one didn't do better)

This was a very tough contest to score, for me. I thought so many were worthy of winning. A 4 way tie for 1st and a 3 way tie for second was the result of finally 'throwing my hands' up.

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Posted 19 September 2011 - 03:07 PM

What a cool surprise!!! :)

Thanks to everyone for your kind words and for the ones that placed me first this month. It means a lot to me!! :)

Congrats Joe!! :) Your song was very cute and would make a cool country song. :)

My personal favs were...
The Streets of York-- Starsinmyeyes
Are You Staying Home Tonight-Jonie
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Happy-Len-- I had the last two as tied for 2nd place.

I had many tied for 3rd... :blink:

It was harder to score as Alistair mentioned with 17 entries. I had to mark many the same, as I didn't want to give someone a low mark, if the lyric was well-done, just because there were many of them. I would still love to have a .5 increments in the scoring, though I know this has been discussed and dismissed before. It would make it easier to distinquish as one clear above another, when there are so many entries. Just my take on it...
BUT.. I don't wanna start another scoring debate, so I will hush. B) :ph34r:

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Posted 19 September 2011 - 03:55 PM

View PostIronknee, on 19 September 2011 - 11:25 AM, said:

Hey all......I didn't fair well, at all....but I've always said that you are only as good as others say you are.......I couldn't understand some of the work submitted, but they scored much better than I......congratulations! -Tom


I took a closer look at your score and realized that there was a zero in there. Somehow I missed inputing a number. Sorry about that.

Anyway, this raises your score to 103.

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Posted 19 September 2011 - 04:06 PM

View PostNeal K, on 19 September 2011 - 03:55 PM, said:

View PostIronknee, on 19 September 2011 - 11:25 AM, said:

Hey all......I didn't fair well, at all....but I've always said that you are only as good as others say you are.......I couldn't understand some of the work submitted, but they scored much better than I......congratulations! -Tom


I took a closer look at your score and realized that there was a zero in there. Somehow I missed inputing a number. Sorry about that.

Anyway, this raises your score to 103.

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I thought that zero was really strange. Don't think I've seen one when looking at earlier contests. Good catch, Neal.
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Posted 19 September 2011 - 05:36 PM

Congrats Kim. Well deserved.
And thanks for all the "Joe love".
Who would have guessed that a song about excessive drinking and one night stands would touch so many.
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Posted 19 September 2011 - 06:47 PM

View PostAlistair S, on 19 September 2011 - 12:36 PM, said:

Congratulations, Kim! Looking at my scores and looking at your lyric again, I suspect that I underscored your lyric - but it didn't matter in the end :)

My top mark went to JoeinJax (and I guessed it was you, Joe!). It's a good, fun lyric that could make a very good song!

I think I had Len's "Happy", with a couple of others in second spot.

While I had some scored higher than it seems they received on average from other voters, I can't quibble with the results. I found it hard to score (17 entries is a lot to balance out, I found!), and probably found myself having to give some absolute scores that were a little lower than I would have liked to give, purely for that reason.

Lots to enjoy in this month's entries, I thought. Well done, everyone who entered and thank you to Neil and SpanishBuddha!


Wow, thanks Alistair. That is quite a compliment. I suppose it is easy to identify my work. Look for a lot of drinking and a character with less than honorable intentions, and I am usually close by (in character.....)
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Posted 19 September 2011 - 09:06 PM

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 04:35 AM

Congratulations on 1st Place, Kim! You had mentioned you hadn't placed this year, and you took care of that in fine fashion! And congratulations to Joe. Another strong showing for you!!

I had Alistair's "Same, Bad Feelings" in at #1, and I had Stars' "The Streets of York" in at #2.

(for the record, I missed an "s" on the word "keep" in mine. I rewrote the line a number of times, and just missed changing it. Something tells me that having that "s" in there..............would not have helped mine at all!) :P

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 07:24 AM

Congratulations, Kim!!!

I thought that "Kings and Queens" was the clear leader on the board... i had "Streets of York" neck and neck with it, but after close deliberation, thought yours had the nod... Found the two somewhat similar for some reason, though.

After that... wha!!! i was totally confused.... in a good way - had 11 or 12 that i just could not separate out, i thought they all were very solid and i was close to giving them all the same tie for third. Any given read through, i would compile a significantly different order to them. My master spreadsheet had them stacking up all within about 0.5 points, just all on top of each other.

I liked Joe's humor and it doesn't surprise me one bit that it could vie for first place this month. I liked Maurreen's atmosphere - I heard Lou Reed on this one. I liked the Webb Wilder-like feel of Feegis'. I could really hear Jonie's being sung country style. I really liked Graybeard's entry as well - i just accidentally stumbled upon Keane's "Clear Skies" and after listening to that, i could hear "When I Lost You" being sung quite clearly. And Nevergoback's entry had a nice abstract quality that really made me have to study and think a bit.

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 08:22 AM

Huge congrats Kim! To win with so many entries is no small thing!! :)

Huge congrats to you also Joe!! :)

Kim I had you and Joe tied for 1st place. I had Any wind and Are you staying home tonight tied for 2nd. :)

Thanks for the contest Neil!

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 12:08 PM

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I liked Maurreen's atmosphere - I heard Lou Reed on this one.


Thanks. That's interesting. I wouldn't have imagined Lou Reed for that.

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 01:31 PM

I quite enjoyed reading the titles next to the writers' names. Some interesting titles came up...


Happy Len
Are You Staying Home (Tonight) Jonie?
Same, Bad Feelings Alistair
Set Your Pride Aside Dottie
One Step at a Time AndyLef
Garbage Man Gordon
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Wishful Thinking Nevergoback
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Posted 20 September 2011 - 01:37 PM

You missed a goody, Len

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 02:06 PM

Thanks Jonie for watching out :D

Then I started playing with pairs of titles...

Are You Staying Home (Tonight) Jonie? ... Wishful Thinking Nevergoback
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Posted 20 September 2011 - 02:48 PM

Fun stuff!

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Posted 20 September 2011 - 03:33 PM

Interesting collection of lyrics this month - I too had difficulty seperating them only managing a score range of 7-5 this time round.

Managed to pick the winner - well done KL! :)

Had a seven way tie for 2nd - "Are you staying home tonight" (never would have guessed this was Jonie!), "The Streets of York" (nice idea), "Better than I used to be", "Happy", "Garbage Man", "Set Your Pride aside" (loved the use of "snugger" here!) and "Connection".

Had a nine way tie for third and if I'd had half-point scoring I'd have elevated Gordon for his courage with "Garbage" and to Bernnaby for taking on a very difficult emotive subject with a nice sensitivity.

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Posted 21 September 2011 - 02:41 AM

Hey everyone and congratulations Kim!!!! I'm very happy for you! and well done Joeinjax as well :) .

This was a tough one to score, but Alistair managed to score my 10 with Same Bad Feelings, jonie came in second with "Are you Staying Home Tonight?" and I had Joeinjax's "The More Handsome I Get" third, with Kim's "To Dine with Kings and Queens" just a skerric behind them, I also really liked Gordons "Garbage Man".

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Posted 21 September 2011 - 12:54 PM

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