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A quick little melody Rough guitar demo

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Posted 04 January 2011 - 10:04 PM

This is a rough demo. There are some mistakes but I wanted to see if anyone had any crits on the melody

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Posted 11 February 2011 - 12:20 AM

0:26 went Zepplin on me. [I'll come back and reference which song when it hits me but it's one I like.]

I found it a bit hard to sing to, so to speak.

Too, I think you're own singering - no typo - could have used a little bit more ornamention for my taste, in the lead segments. I think for its coloring, which is familiar, then that might sort it from others with the same features.

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Posted 23 July 2011 - 01:11 PM

I liked it a lot. Good chord structure. Needs a little volume, though.

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Posted 18 August 2011 - 11:44 PM

Not a bad melody. You play it a little clumsily. But I get the idea. You use repetition, which is almost always a part of good/great melodies.
You use a 4 phrase structure, again, a long standing method.
The first phrase ends on a weak beat, the 2nd phrase ends on a strong beat.
Again, an age old method, and a good one. I think you should make the 4th phrase end on a strong beat also.
The chord part has no melody, of course. The chords are nice.
This needs more, obviously. More development to make it a complete melody.
A good beginning.
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Posted 23 January 2013 - 12:52 AM

:) B) Probably makes the intro of a good country tune about figuring out what love is or was.

View PostPhil72660, on 04 January 2011 - 10:04 PM, said:

This is a rough demo. There are some mistakes but I wanted to see if anyone had any crits on the melody

Thank you Phil



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