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December Song Comp **** Results ****

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Posted 01 December 2010 - 03:55 PM

Welcome to the Musesmuse December song comp :)

This is your last chance this year to get into the coveted Song Of The Year comp

Dec: 5 - 10 (enter) Dec 11 - 15 (scorecards)

This is an open format competition which means you can have as much instrumentation/production as you like.
If you are thinking of entering please check the Rules first
Full schedule for the year and 2010 results so far can be found here

Post:
  • song title
  • writer credits (If it’s a collab with another muser please make that clear by including their muser id)
  • audio link

Note, if you have joined the Muse since 1st Nov 2010 you are ineligible to enter or vote in this particular competition

You have until Dec 10 to get your entry in

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Posted 05 December 2010 - 01:11 PM

Closed for entries - Scoring begins:

We have 13 entries this month :)

9 of the songs can be heard here at Musesmuse December 2010 Station - use links in the thread for any songs not on the station

To be eligible to score you must have been a member of Musesmuse prior to 1st Nov 2010 and have a minimum of 25 posts.

Please send your scores to me via PM and put “Song Comp Votes” in the subject. You should receive confirmation within 24 hours or at least by the time scoring closes.

Please score each song from 1 to 10 (please rate them in the order listed below)

You rate each song from 1 - 10 (where 1 is poor and 10 is excellent)
Note that only one 10 and one 9 score can be awarded per voter, or the scorecard will be invalid

If a scorecard contains a score not a whole number in the range of 1 to 10 it will be deemed invalid.

Contestants do not score their own song, they will receive an average of the score they award other songs (see rule 13a)


The songs are:

Change - Thinman
Gonna Start a Bonfire - Kimberlyinnc
One Last Chance To Shine - Alistair S
Just Trust the Tales - Zeligovitch
The Fall Of Man - Jason Kalman
The Start Of The Dance - musefrommichigan
See Papa Run - graybeard
Ghost Tears - Dottie
Relentless Love - FunkDaddy
Breathe - starsinmyeyes
S.A.D. - Harreh
Blah-Blah Blah-Blah Blah-Blah - DonnaMarilyn
With You - lyD


You have until Wed 15th Dec to get your scores in. I will post the results the next day

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Posted 05 December 2010 - 01:14 PM

Here is the result of the December Comp:

1st - One Last Chance To Shine - Alistair S

2nd - With You - lyD


17 scorecards. 3 non-contestant voters were: NigeQ, Salley Gardens, & bubblingsoul

Full result

One Last Chance To Shine - Alistair S 7.88av
8 7 10 8 6 9 6 8 6 9 10 8 6 7 7 10 9
With You - lyD 7.18av
6 6 8 9 7 8 5 9 8 7 8 3 7 8 8 7 8
Gonna Start a Bonfire - Kimberlyinnc 7.00av
8 7 7 6 6 6 8 7 5 6 8 8 8 7 5 9 8
The Fall Of Man - Jason Kalman 6.53av
6 6 9 5 6 7 6 5 5 8 7 7 8 7 4 8 7
Just Trust the Tales - Zeligovitch 6.35av
9 6 8 6 5 5 8 7 7 7 6 5 7 4 5 6 7
Change - Thinman 6.18av
5 5 8 8 6 5 5 3 9 5 8 6 6 6 8 5 7
Ghost Tears - Dottie 6.12av
7 6 7 4 7 5 6 5 5 6 8 8 8 4 3 7 8
The Start Of The Dance - musefrommichigan 6.00av
7 5 6 5 7 6 6 5 4 7 7 4 6 4 8 8 7
Relentless Love - FunkDaddy 5.94av
3 6 8 6 7 6 5 6 4 7 9 2 8 5 7 6 6
S.A.D. - Harreh 5.94av
4 5 8 5 6 5 7 3 6 8 6 8 7 6 6 6 5
Breathe - starsinmyeyes 5.71av
5 5 7 4 7 4 5 10 5 5 8 5 6 4 6 6 5
Blah-Blah Blah-Blah Blah-Blah - DonnaMarilyn 5.71av
5 5 7 5 6 6 6 1 4 5 6 5 6 3 10 7 10
See Papa Run - graybeard 5.41av
6 5 8 4 7 5 7 3 5 7 7 5 6 4 1 6 6


One Last Chance To Shine and With You qualify for the year-end final. Congratulations!! Get ready to post in the 2010 - Song Competitions thread which is pinned on this board.

Thanks to all who took part either by entering or voting. Especially those non-contestants – all 3 of us!! ;)

Watch out for the Song of the Year comps coming soon

Nige :)

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Posted 05 December 2010 - 02:53 PM

The Thinman is back - you're gonna love this one !!

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Change

A shadow passed across my door
I never felt that chill before
I knew a hound dog found my trail
I heard a siren wail
Everything is different from now on
That was then and it’s all gone

Time is a bitch and she’s never late
My fashion statement is out of date
Looking for heaven and all I found
Is the sky - and it’s fallen down
God was looking at me
He said “Heaven is history”

Change ---- is gonna come
One day ---- for everyone
and change ---- can be unkind
Change ---- will change your mind
but change ---- is not decline
Change ---- will take you higher - you’re gonna Change

I seen angels and demons
But mostly demons
They come at me when I'm drinkin'
They come at me when I'm dreamin'
I seen angels and demons - but mostly demons

One time a 3 foot demon came at me
With a cup of blood and a piece of meat
He said "This is the devil's communion
You gotta drink and you gotta eat
You gotta drink and you gotta eat"

And one time a demon
Came into my room
He was as tall as the ceiling
He was kinda draped
Every kind of shape
I didn't like that demon
And he said "One day all of thisssssssssss
Can be yoursssssssssssssss"
I didn't like that demon
Didn't lie him at all
He said


"It’s not the lies that you been sold
And it’s not the rags of growing old
In the stare of the devil’s eyes
They tell you all the religious lies
God said to Abraham – kill me a son
Abe was a believer and he got the job done"

Change ---- is gonna come
Better ---- for everyone
and change ---- is not a fight
Change ---- can be delight
and change ---- is gonna hurt
but Change ---- aint gonna wait for you - you’re gonna change

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Posted 05 December 2010 - 08:56 PM

This was a collaboration effort, though none would accept credit on the song, they helped me very much.

Vocals-Sarah Kingswell (skingswell)
Music instumentation, and Vocal Harmony-Nat Sisco ( Zeek)
Drums and Harmonies Ryan Brady
Lyrics-Basic Melody-Kimberly Hales Kime (kimberlyinnc)



Gonna Start a Bonfire

I'll burn the strip of photographs
Taken in that tiny booth
You were making silly faces
We laughed the whole day through

I'll burn all the love letters
The heart shaped Valentines
The ones I have read
at least a thousand times

Chorus
Gonna start a bonfire
Oh, I think its time
Stack it high with memories
And fan it with goodbye
Gonna start a bonfire
And build it ten miles high
Watch it light up the sky
while I kiss our love goodbye


When I caught you in the parking lot
Lip stick marks were on your face
The desire burning in your eyes
Revealed the truth that day

I bet you've never told her
All the plans that we have made
But I won't try to stop you
My heart just walked away

Repeat Chorus

Musical Break

Bridge
Your blind passion made the flames burn oh so bright
What I thought was eternal love went up in smoke tonight

Repeat Chorus

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Gonna start a bonfire, Gonna start a bonfire gonna start a bonfire, (fading)

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Posted 06 December 2010 - 06:56 AM

One Last Chance To Shine

Alistair S

An ordinary man in an ordinary town,
Ordinary shoes in an ordinary brown,
Getting old, and I’m,
Like these worn out boots of mine,
Looking for one last chance to shine
One last chance to shine,
One last chance to get it right,
Looking for one last chance to shine.

An ordinary night in an ordinary bar,
An ordinary singer and a battered, old guitar.
Music helps, I find,
Ease a troubled mind,
Looking for one last chance to shine
One last chance to shine,
One last chance to get it right,
Looking for one last chance to shine.

Lonely people here don’t ever talk - won’t share the time of day.
Driven by our fear, we always walk on by and look the other way.

It’s an ordinary life; an ordinary world.
An ordinary boy can meet an ordinary girl.
Couples passing by,
Happens all the time.
Lost in love, with every chance to shine.
One last chance to shine,
One last chance to get it right,
Looking for one last chance to shine.

An ordinary man, of ordinary means
An ordinary longing to escape the old routines
An ordinary guy
Long since past his prime
Looking for one last chance to shine
Looking for one last chance to shine.
Looking for one last chance to shine.
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Posted 06 December 2010 - 02:49 PM

Just Trust the Tales

Music : Tanguy Thoveron (Zeligovitch)
Lyrics : Tanguy Thoveron and Malin Hellman

These words of mine
Are leading you on
I tell you of my travels
At dawn

Imagination
Can lead you where
You shouldn't take your luggage
But air

Just trust the tales
You are hearing
Made by my mind for your thoughts
I'm making up
And you're believing
It's about walking on the moon

Like little Thumb
When he had boots
You escape from your ogre
And find our roots


Weightlessness is a treasure
For the woman who
Is taken by the pleasure
Of you

Just trust the tales
You are hearing
Made by my mind for your thoughts
I'm making up
And you're believing
It's about walking on the moon

Imagination
Can lead you where
You shouldn't take your luggage
But air

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Posted 07 December 2010 - 11:43 AM

The Fall Of Man

Jason Kalman

Verse I
I traveled time
To where the Tigris and Euphrates bind
Past the armed Cherubim
And the beautiful Seraphim
At the tree of knowledge
Stands a girl

Chorus
It’s the fall of Man
It’s the fall from Grace
If I stop Eve now
Could I change our fate?
It's the fall of a man
It's the fall of Man

Verse II
Eve, I know it’s hard for you to understand
The role you play in the fall of man
I beg you please just put down the prize
And walk away from the serpent’s lies

Chorus
It’s the fall of Man
It’s the fall from Grace
If I stop Eve now
Could I change our fate?
It's the fall of a man
It's the fall of Man

Verse III
Eve smiled at me and said
I want to know love
I want to feel the pain
I want to see my naked soul dance in the rain
I watched as Eve
She took the bite

Bridge
And I saw her tears flow
As it echoes our life
And the world that we know
From a selfless sacrifice

Chorus
It’s the fall of Man
It’s the fall from Grace
If I had stopped Eve then
Could I have changed our fate?
It’s the fall of a man
It’s the fall of Man



words, music, acoustic/electric lead and rhythm guitars, bass, drums, vocals, recording, mix, production: Jason Kalman
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Posted 07 December 2010 - 09:40 PM

It feels nice to be back.

The Guitar piece was composed by Ken Damkier from Denmark.
He offered his piece to be used by anyone who might want
to make a song or work with it to ask him and he would make
it available. I asked and was rewarded with the pleasure
of this collaboration.
Words and Music by Ann Mayo Muir


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The Start Of The Dance. 



He saw her descending the circular stair

lovely blue ribbons streamed from her hair

They set off the colors swirling so gay

His heart whispered all he wished to say


She saw him  from the top of the stair      

her intake of breath making her aware

Of feelings that blossomed before she could blink

She steadied herself wanting time to think 


Moving toward the last step where soon she would appear

He heard the click of her shoes drawing near

A lifetime he'd waited for just such a chance  

That she might grant him one sweet dance


But her shoe was caught and she tripped at the end

His arms caught her gently and her laughter did blend

With her smile and her eyes and their grateful glance

As the music began for the start of the dance


The pattern they were dancing traced upon the floor

Their future steps together through 50 years or more

The best of the tale is the lady you see

Remains ever true to the man holding me

Remains ever true to the man holding me
       

Thank you for listening
Annie
 

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Posted 08 December 2010 - 11:59 AM

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Title: See Papa Run
Lyrics by Nathan A. Baker
Music and Vocals by Art Holt
©2010 All Rights Reserved

Weekends you will find him
Down at the local drag strip
His best friend Slim
With him every trip

He’ll race for titles, money,
Or the shirt on his back
He’s a warrior in battle
King of the track

Old school racer
Detroit’s best
Cast iron and steel
That’s been put to test
Nine hundred horses
Don’t jump the gun
When the tree turns green
See Papa run!

Rolling thunder
He’s nitrous fast
Leaves losers to wonder
If he’s running on gas

Old school racer
Detroit’s best
Cast iron and steel
That’s been put to test
Nine hundred horses
Don’t jump the gun
When the tree turns green
See Papa run!

He’ll race for titles, money,
Or the shirt on his back
He’s a warrior in battle
King of the track

Old school racer
Detroit’s best
Cast iron and steel
That’s been put to test
Nine hundred horses
Don’t jump the gun
When the tree turns green
See Papa run!

There he goes boys
Man he’s fast… Ye Haw!


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Posted 08 December 2010 - 03:44 PM

Collaboration- Dottie Corley and Tommy Saethran

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Ghost Tears

Lying in a bed of memories
A sobbing ghost that no one hears
You won’t feel my breath
Or reach to touch my tears

Every breath, a picture of your smile
A memory that I can’t take
For a moment it feels real
Another tear drops off my face

Drops off my face
It’s only ghost tears
It’s only ghost tears

I look into the mirror, all I see
Reflections of a fantasy
Where’s the man I used to be
Well he’s not here anymore

The mirror reflects what I had feared
Your memories are killing me
I see the tears but they’re not real
All that I can see

Drops off my face
It’s only ghost tears
It’s only ghost tears

A lingering phantom is all I am
Mere shadow life has cast
But shadows never last
No, shadows never last~

Drops off my face
It’s only ghost tears
It’s only ghost tears

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Posted 09 December 2010 - 06:00 AM

Relentless Love
Sandra Segovic / Mark Smith

Compelling words from an endless reservoir
Baring your soul, showing me who you are
Your words they embrace me, captivate me
Leaving me in awe, by showing what you can be

With your Relentless Love
I melt from your Relentless Love

So much to say but I'm left speechless
Second seated memories have become my weakness
A timeless smile clears my conscious
My full heart beams regardless

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Posted 10 December 2010 - 01:08 AM

BREATHE
Words and Music by Tracy-Ann Edridge

V1
Red eyes reflect your struggling soul
Suffering can't be erased
Torment's taken full control
Tomorrow's too hard to face

Chorus
Breathe in pain and suffering
Breathe out peace and love
Breathe in sadness for ourselves
Breathe out joy for others

V2
Drowning in a wave of grief
This current tide of pain
Pour out anxious energy
Till no more tears remain

Chorus
Breathe in pain and suffering
Breathe out peace and love
Breathe in sadness for ourselves
Breathe out joy for others

Make it through one minute
Then make it through the next
And when you're feeling overwhelmed
Remember to take a breath

Chorus
Breathe in pain and suffering
Breathe out peace and love
Breathe in sadness for ourselves
Breathe out joy for others

BREATHE!

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Posted 10 December 2010 - 06:56 AM

www.reverbnation.com/harlequinking - at the top of the songs.

S.A.D.

i've been waiting to see you, and that devilish smile
for longer than you would know
you said "it's funny how, somethings never die"
well somethings, dont ever grow

i will open eyes my, and break from this sorrow
if you help me find, a new tomorrow

why is it always the winter, that gets me in this way
like a bad dream that i cant escape
you said "its scary how somethings always change"
well somethings, are always the same

i will open my eyes, and break from this sorrow
if you'll help me find, a new tomorrow
if it's one little day, of short lived emotion
wont you let me embrace, in your devotion

i will open my eyes, and break from this sorrow
if you'll help me find, a new tomorrow
if it's one little day, of short lived emotion
wont you let me embrace, in your devotion



All words and music, written by Harry Crowe.

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My friendship groups soundcloud account for old songs: soundcloud.com/neoncircus

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Posted 10 December 2010 - 08:56 AM

BLAH-BLAH BLAH-BLAH BLAH-BLAH

Donna Devine ("DonnaMarilyn"): Lyrics / Billy Playle: Music/Arrangement/Instruments/Vocals

Blah-Blah Blah-Blah Blah-Blah

(v1)
I came to the table in anticipation
Eager for the give and take
Of dinner conversation
A book, a film, a piece of news
But it was quickly clear
The only views to be expressed
Among the group of four
Would not be very topical
But largely philosophical
So once we’d passed the salad
A dialogue began
And though the meal was lovely
When I remember what I can
It’s…

Chorus 1
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah
Blah-blah ground of being
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah
Knowing without seeing
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah
Blah-blah Eckhart Tolle
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah
Universe grown smaller

(v2)
The third guest was quiet, sat cradling her chin
I slipped her a quiet wink
She answered with a grin
Everything we’d heard before
Rushed in to fill the space
As if the door to insight
Among the group of four
Could not include things topical
But only philosophical
So once we’d passed the salad
A dialogue began
And though the meal was lovely
When I remember what I can
It’s…

Chorus 2
Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah
Blah blah transcendental
Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah
Blah-blah elemental
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah
Transluscent revolution
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah
Spiritual evolution

Insert
Soon my eyes grew heavy as the dialogue droned
I should have been impressed
The list of words was finely honed
Retrocognition
Psychic birth
Paradigm shift
A new earth
Pain body
Cosmic Christ
Byron Katie
Geopathic
Downward pull
Harmonic convergence
Gaia’s emergence

Bridge
As the chicken ratatouille
Cooled in the pot
And the chardonnay warmed
In the bottle
I looked to the open balcony in silence
Where twilight had begun to bruise
In colours of love or of violence
And the silvery leaves of a poplar
Twisted in the soft wind
That would usher in rain
And by morning the world
Would smell fresh and new again

But in the meantime it was...

Chorus 3
Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah
Blah-blah transcendental
Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah blah
Blah-blah elemental
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah
Transluscent revolution
Blah-blah blah-blah blah-blah blah
Spiritual evolution

Outro
Then I turned and smiled at the speakers
Wondering how long it would last
Till the chattering jaybird of knowledge
Would reach a dead end
After flying in narrowing circles
Up its own tiny ass

© 2010 Donna Devine
Honour the earth. Without it, we'd be nowhere.

Life is too important to take seriously.

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Posted 10 December 2010 - 06:36 PM

Last minute as usual :) This was in the 1+1 contest last year, but I've finally put a proper recording together.

With You
by David Butler (lyD)

Show me the future
Swallow my past
Tell me to love you
I'll do as you ask
With you it's all I can do

Paint me in colours
I've never seen
Take me to places
I've never been
With you everything's new

CHORUS
I've never been a loving man
But I hope I can be true
I've never been a loving man
But I know I can be with you

So do me a favour
And don't let me go
Tell me you love me
So I'll always know
With you I'll never be blue

CHORUS

With you the sun can shine down brighter than before
With you the rain may come to trip me up
But you'll be there to catch me if I fall

CHORUS
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Posted 16 December 2010 - 04:40 PM

Results are in - see post #3 above

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:09 PM

Congrats Alistair for taking First Place. I also voted yours as first choice!! It is a very moving song. :)

Pat on the back and a big ole' kissie :P to David for 2nd place! Love that song, I remember it from the 1+1 contest before. It is really pretty.

I chose as my 3rd choice Jason's The Fall of Man. It had a current sound, enjoyed it.

It was great to see Dottie in, I think was her first "song" contest..if I am mistaken, please forgive my feeble memory and I am thrilled to Annie(musefrommichigan) back again!! Very nice piece, both of you!! I have missed you, Annie.


Thank you for the vote of 3rd Place on Gonna Start a Bonfire. I appreciate it and I am sure it will mean alot to Sarah, Nat (zeek) and Ryan.


Thank you Nigel for doing the contest, as always!!!

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:16 PM

Congrats Alistair :) Actually, I must admit this was one of the few occasions I haven't had your song in the top few - it's a lovely tune, but as I mentioned I found the percussion too off-putting to really enjoy it. I'm delighted to hear you adding to your arrangements though, and I'm pleased to see I was in a small minority on this one!

Gonna Start A Bonfire was one of my favourites from the start, and Ghost Tears and Relentless Love really worked their way into my head, ending up as two of my favourites. I'm surprised they didn't score higher. The Fall Of Man too. In fact, I didn't think there was a weak song among the lot.

Thanks for my 2nd place too :) And thanks to Nige and our small collection of non-contestant voters, you guys are the best!
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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:18 PM

Ouch :blink: Good thing this is one of the scrapped ideas for my current artist project.

I thought "Breathe" was the standout of this bunch, not a great production, but an awesome Lily Allen UK pop vibe.

I knocked off points from a few entries for auto-tuned vocals. Jason probably would have had my second place vote if not for that fact. As it is, lyD had my second place vote.

Production brought down my score for Thinman as well. Drums panned to the right channel and vocals to the left made it very hard to listen to.

Alistair's song was very well written and very nicely produced, just not my cuppa tea, not surprised he won this one :)
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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:30 PM

Woah.. I wasn't expecting that! I think this is the first open format I have ever won, and I'm thrilled.

However, I am surprised. I thought this was a strong field.

I think I had Thinman on top, with what I thought was a really strong song. Maybe Robby's style is an acquired taste, but I'm surprised it didn't do better!

I placed Lyd second (but only just - I was humming and hahing over the two top songs for a while).

I also enjoyed Zeligovitch's entry. There were so many entries this time around that some songs had to be scored lower than I felt they deserved to distinguish between songs. All were good in their own way, but these were my top 3.

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:36 PM

The Thinman in the top half ! I'm a mainstream artist man !

I liked Ghost Tears and SAD and should've claimed my rightful position below them

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:37 PM

Congratulations, gentlemen!

My top pick was "With You", followed by Alistair's and Thinman's songs tied for second place.

My favorite lyrics were, "Blah Blah Blah". If this had been a spoken word comp, they'd have gotten my high score!

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 05:50 PM

Congratulations to Alistair. I gave him my best note, so I think he deserves his victory. It's a beautiful song. Thanks to the guys who gave me high notes and of course, especially to you, who gave me a 9. I also want to apologize to the person who gave me a 4. I know how I feel personally after listening to a song that deserves a 4: bored and wanting my time back. So sorry for wasting your time. :)
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Posted 16 December 2010 - 06:04 PM

Congrats Alistair on your first win! Yay, I can only imagine how great it must feel. :)

Congrats Lyd on 2nd place. :)

I had Alistair and Kim tied for 1st place, I just couldn't decide between them.

I had a 4 way tie for 2nd place, FD, Zeligovitch, Jason, and lyd even though I listened several times I couldn’t pick just one!

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 07:26 PM

Well done, Alistair! The minute I heard the song, I knew it was a "shoo-in". :) Really lovely work. ;)

And well done everyone else, too. It's always difficult to choose from among songs, because they're all so different and each has something special about it. ;)

Salley, thanks for your comment about the Blah-Blah lyrics. :) I absolutely love that the votes ranged from 1 to 10 (and 2 X 10 at that). :P :D

Anyway, it was an excellent competition, and I'm looking forward to voting for Song of the Year. ;)

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 07:37 PM

Congratulations Alistair, You won a well deserved first place and I am very happy for you. It certainly has a universal appeal in my book. It was very powerful in an understated kind of way, yet far from ordinary.

Like Salley Gardens' I also loved Blah Blah Blah. It was so original and great fun. Lyd , I loved your song and scored you high up there among my favorites. It was beautifully focused and very touching.

Hey Kimberly, you did a fine job on light a bonfire. I can relate to that one.
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Posted 16 December 2010 - 07:51 PM

Congrats to Alistair and Gary!

There wasn't a weak song in the mix and it was very hard picking the top songs.

With that said, I had Zeligovitch and Kimberly tied for first and for second (another tie) I had Greybeard and Harreh.

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 07:53 PM

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Salley, thanks for your comment about the Blah-blah lyrics. I absolutely love that the votes ranged from 1 to 10 (and 2 X 10 at that).
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Donna, I just have to say, I do not understand anyone scoring a 1 for any one of these songs on this contest!

It is beyond my understanding. I know you will probably not raise a stink over this, as you are not that type of person, but I am sure it is hurtful for you, as it would be anyone to get a one. :unsure: :huh:

Any effort on a song that comes out more than what a monkey may bang on a pot and pan deserves more than a one. I just don't get it. People surprize me, no matter how old I get.

Just saying.

Now, I bet I will get a one next time for saying this. :lol: :blink:

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 08:32 PM

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Salley, thanks for your comment about the Blah-blah lyrics. I absolutely love that the votes ranged from 1 to 10 (and 2 X 10 at that).
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Donna, I just have to say, I do not understand anyone scoring a 1 for any one of these songs on this contest!

It is beyond my understanding. I know you will probably not raise a stink over this, as you are not that type of person, but I am sure it is hurtful for you, as it would be anyone to get a one. :unsure: :huh:

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Kim, believe me, it doesn't worry me one iota. :) I truly find it amusing, and love the irony. I understand that everyone comes from a different perspective, and on a number of levels. ;) It's all good. :D

Roll on 2011, and more competitions! It's tremendous that more people are taking part now. I hope that continues. I only wish more of the Muse members would bother to vote. :P

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Posted 16 December 2010 - 08:50 PM

Donna, that is a good way to look at it. I agree, I do hope more musers either enter, vote or both. :)


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Posted 17 December 2010 - 03:30 AM

donna, i was completely blown a way by your song, and am so surprised you didnt win.
i read the lyrics and i thought "this cant be serious..."
but then after hearing the actual track, i really did think you would have won that hands down.

anyways, that was fun, cant wait for more contents :)
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Posted 17 December 2010 - 07:35 AM

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Donna, I just have to say, I do not understand anyone scoring a 1 for any one of these songs on this contest!


I'll gladly justify that score when people justify my 2 and 3 :)
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Posted 17 December 2010 - 08:01 AM

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View Postkimberlyinnc, on 16 December 2010 - 07:53 PM, said:

Donna, I just have to say, I do not understand anyone scoring a 1 for any one of these songs on this contest!


I'll gladly justify that score when people justify my 2 and 3 :)


Yo FD

I'm the one who gave you a 2

I thought it was a 'kin awful song - I only gave it a 2 cos of the "production" (something that I don't consider all that important in the grand scheme of all things)

It started off well - I thought it was gonna be a contender man but then the verse turned into a watered down Van Morrison tribute (to his bad periods) with banal and painful words - but then I hit the chorus and the wheels really fell off when everything started playing in random time with the vocal droning on about relentless love and it really was relentless - refrigginlentless

Then when it hit the 2nd verse I don't think I've ever heard such a collection of mushy sickly sweet nonsensical lyrics - and it went on and on - and then the Bontempi organ bit man !!! No no no

I don't mean no disrespect but, as I have found out on many occasions, you are a plain talking guy so I know you will take it constructively. Anyways enough of the musers liked it so the consensus is against me for sure.

I really can't stand bullschitt songs about relentless lerv

I think you should try the Astral Weeks style

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Posted 17 December 2010 - 08:08 AM

thinman.
i hate to jump the gun on you, especially as i have no need/sensible reason to
but whether FD is 'a plain talking guy' or not, i really think you should edit some of those comments
a lot of them are just plain mean, and very offensive to anyone, regardless of the way they talk themselves....
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Posted 17 December 2010 - 08:10 AM

Fair enough, though I completely disagree. :lol: Doesn't upset me at all, as I said, it's a thrown away idea for our project, the first one we finished and neither of us was all that thrilled. I thought it was a good tune though and don't think the 4 and under scores are warranted. We're already onto much better tunes though...so 2011 Muse contests here I come B)

Why I scored Donna's song a 1 was very simple, I didn't think it was a song at all. It was spoken word over a bed of music. I could expand on that further but since she hasn't asked for a critique, I'll refrain :)

Edit: Harreh, no need to ask he censor himself on my account, I asked and was pretty sure he'd scored me either the 2 or 3 anyways.
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Posted 17 December 2010 - 10:51 AM

Please note if you want to discuss scoring or song comp ideas in general please use Contest Discussion Thread - Please keep this thread December comp only

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Posted 17 December 2010 - 11:20 AM

Well done everyone and thanks for anyone voting for Kim's Song 'Bonfire' cause I know how hard she and everyone else worked on it.

There was some really good songs in there! I thought Alistair's was amazing so very well done to you Alistair :D
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Posted 17 December 2010 - 12:46 PM

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...playing in random time with the vocal droning on about relentless love and it really was relentless - refrigginlentless...
I really can't stand bullschitt songs about relentless lerv

Robby, your critique of FD's song really made me chuckle! I think (hope) that's your sense of humor that's popping out... Just so you know, *I* was the person who used the word "relentless" to describe one of your songs on the feedback forum. ;)

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Why I scored Donna's song a 1 was very simple, I didn't think it was a song at all. It was spoken word over a bed of music. I could expand on that further but since she hasn't asked for a critique, I'll refrain :)

I almost did the same for the same reason.

When I first read the lyrics, I thought they were so brilliant, I *knew* I was going to score "10" before hearing the music. I knew they would be hard to set, but I thought *any* melody to them would suffice for a high score. When I heard no melody at all, I almost gave a "1". I just couldn't do it... (and *not* because I thought it would be "un-nice" or hurt Donna's feelings...)because the lyrics were *so* good. I scored it a 5, and felt almost guilty for scoring it that high, because I didn't consider it a song.

My score of 5 didn't reflect how I felt about Donna's piece of art (which was clearly a 10), nor did it reflect that it seemed to me to be in the wrong contest. But that score ended up reflecting the two extremes it got!

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Posted 17 December 2010 - 05:00 PM

Kim!!! A solid 3rd place!!! Very glad for you and our collaberative efforts.

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Kim!!! A solid 3rd place!!! Very glad for you and our collaberative efforts.

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Thanks Zeek, it would not have happened without you, Sarah and Ryan!

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