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October Lyric Contest Let the scoring begin!!

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Posted 05 October 2010 - 01:51 PM

The October Lyric writing contest is now open for entries. In the spirit of Halloween, the theme of this month's contest is "something scary." That doesn't mean your lyric has to be about witches, deamons, and monsters (but it can be if you want). You might be scared of being alone, or scared of starting a new relationship or you might be afraid of heights, or you might be afraid of the water. Doesn't matter. Just as long as it's something scary.

Same rules as always (you can read them in full here) but in short they are:

- Send your lyric to me by Private Message before the end of October 17.
- You must have 25 posts to be able to enter
- Lyrics must not have been posted on the Muse before or in the same month's song contests
- MAKE SURE YOU ARE HAPPY WITH YOUR LYRIC BEFORE YOU SEND IT AND THAT YOU ARE SENDING ME THE CORRECT VERSION. I will no longer post revisions or corrections once your initial entry has been posted.

How & when to provide scores:
NEW: Scoring begins on Monday, October 18 @ 9:00 Pacific Standard Time. That gives me a chance to post any last minute entries on Monday morning before scoring.

- When the contest closes, I will provide a list of the songs and instructions on how to submit scores
- If you enter, you must provide a score
- Vote for all lyrics except your own on a scale of 1 to 10
- Your scores must be whole numbers. No half numbers.
- Your lyric gets the average score you gave the others
- Scores must be in by the end of October 21
- Winners will be announced the following day

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Posted 06 October 2010 - 11:43 AM

A Ghost Of Me

A hollow heart
An empty chest
A vessel unfilled
And my once strong and steady pulse
Now sits silent and stilled

I'm not the boy I was
I'm not the man I ought to be
I'm a Shadow of my former self
I'm a Ghost... of me

As lips quiver
Tongue stays still
Words mumbled at best
The bravado of this young man
Has become a nervous mess

I'm not the boy I was
I'm not the man I ought to be
I'm a Shadow of my former self
I'm a Ghost... of me

It's a sin to kill a mockingbird
But it's worse to break a heart
No-one will ever sing again
Once their world's been torn apart

A vacant mind
And solemn look
Now Vegetation remains
Happy thoughts from years ago
Now memories and stains

I'm not the boy I was
I'm not the man I ought to be
I'm a Shadow of my former self
I'm a Ghost... of me.
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Posted 07 October 2010 - 10:54 AM

Monsters

End of the day, I get home late
Feed the dog, fix a plate
Watch some TV, brush my teeth and go to bed
I donít fall straight off to sleep
Something here just seems to keep
My eyes wide open and a stirring in my head

(chorus)
Monsters under my bed, theyíre all in my head
I remind myself that theyíre not really real
But tell that to the monsters
I think theyíd beg to differ
Because the bottom line
I feel the way I feel

Mailman laughing, delivering bills
Psycho neighbor promising to kill
My dog if he comes back on his perfect lawn
Dentist coming at me with a drill
Not even telling me to sit still
The appointment set for the break of dawn

(chorus)

Taxmanís claws Ďcross my closet door
Boss man slithering across the floor
Scheming ex-wifeís image in the mirror
Iím not sure if Iím paying for sins
And Iím not sure how they all got in
But I know my monsters, and all of them are here

(chorus)

I thought that Iíd be past all this
After living 40 years
But truth is in perception
And relativity of fears

Shadows moving across my wall
Time has slowed down to a death crawl
And Iím not getting on with what Iím here to do
Iím left with nothing but time to think
Of crazy things that only make me sink
Further down into a deeper shade of blue

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Posted 08 October 2010 - 10:46 AM

Our Heads Were Smashed

Verse 1
Halloween night thunder and lightning
Full moon rising over the hill
Goblins are out it is going to be frightening
Got my heart set for a thrill

Verse 2
Wind and rain, elements biting,
Night air filled with a chill
Hackles up, my neck hairs are fighting,
Everything seems surreal

Chorus
The Mad Hatter summoned spirits
A magnum bottle of sour mash
We sat around bouncing quarters
Drinking shots until our heads were smashed

Verse 3
When we walked outside we saw a zombie
Gnawing on a bone like a hungry man
No eyes in his head but he was looking at me
Mumbling words I didnít understand

Verse 4
He pointed to a witch on the sidewalk
Knocked out by a lightning strike
He tried to explain but he couldnít talk
We finally got the story right

Chorus
The Mad Hatter summoned spirits
A magnum bottle of sour mash
We sat around bouncing quarters
Drinking shots until our heads were smashed

Bridge
When the sun came up I was all alone
Laying in the grass on a cemetery lawn
Smell of mash whiskey on my breath
At my head a newly etched gravestone

Chorus
The Mad Hatter summoned spirits
A magnum bottle of sour mash
We sat around bouncing quarters
Drinking shots until our heads were smashed
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 12 October 2010 - 11:02 AM

Southern Ghost

V1
Once upon a time there was an over told story,
about a southern ghost
Haunts my heart, haunts my soul, and the ones I love,
It haunts my mama the most.
Based a little on fact and a little more on fiction
my tall tale, oh no ,it ainít no different.

<chorus>
You olí Southern ghost, southern ghost
Soul skippin through the wind, like summers night breeze
wondering like hell ,when your coming back for me
southern ghost
<>
V2
You were a decent manís man ,knew right from wrong,
and your intentions were good
A silent rebel spirit spoiled your heart and mind
which kept you misunderstood
In and out of prison you left a hand full of lies
And a pocket full of ghost stories to make me do right

<chorus>
You olí Southern ghost, southern ghost
Soul skippin through the wind, like summers night breeze
wondering like hell ,when your coming back for me
southern ghost

<Bridge>
You olí Southern ghost, southern ghost
Left a toddler ,your son,
out the door on the run
Back when I was nine,
to disappear in the night
southern ghost

<chorus>
You olí Southern ghost, southern ghost
Soul skippin through the wind, like summers night breeze
wondering like hell ,when your coming back for me
southern ghost

oh , you ol southern ghost
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Posted 13 October 2010 - 07:13 PM

Ghost Lover

Woke up in the night, the hour was witchin'
Dogs were howling, the curtains started twitchin'
Floating through the air came a lady in white
Saying "hey, be my lover tonight"

Chorus
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ooo, she addled my brains
Ooo, she rattled my chains
Ghost lover

All the hairs were standing along my nape
Moonlight shining, showing all her shapes
Said she was born in seventeen eighty
Well I've a thing for the older lady

Chorus
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ooo, she addled my brains
Ooo, she rattled my chains
Ghost lover

Bridge
She took me to the other side of passion
With every touch of her ectoplasm

In the morning I was cold as stone
I called her name but I was alone
Now my hair's turned white and my thoughts are black
Cause I'm so scared she won't come back

Chorus
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ooo, she addled my brains
Ooo, she rattled my chains
Ghost lover

Out
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
Ghost lover, whooo oo oo
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 15 October 2010 - 10:52 AM

Circa 1975 Again

I was apprehensive
It sounded like a sin
A virgin to the experience
Until my boyfriend clued me in

Drove uptown to Sunset
It was all Hallowís Eve
On the street, lines of freaks and groupies
With their bags of spells, tricks and treats

When the curtain opened
The audience went wild
Confetti was flying everywhere
Rocky was dancing in the aisles

Chorus
We did the Time Warp (Time Warp)
again and again
Somehow it didnít (No, it didnít)
feel like a sin
Riff Raff, Columbia and Magenta joined in
We were circa 1975 again,
Circa 1975 Again!

Sweet Transvestite was cool
Eddie lost half his mind
While the Hot Patooties were shaking
to the rock beat of Frankenstein

Damn it, Janet was hot
Brad was eager to please
Dr. Scott leered, Janet began to sing
Touch-a Touch-a Touch-a Touch me

Chorus
We did the Time Warp (Time Warp)
again and again
Somehow it didnít (No, it didnít)
feel like a sin
Riff Raff, Columbia and Magenta joined in
We were circa 1975 again,
Circa 1975 Again!

Bridge
What a show
What a horror
Great Scott, Rocky
Can we come again tomorrow?

Chorus 2
Letís do the Time Warp (Time Warp)
again and again
Somehow it doesnít (No, it doesnít)
feel like a sin
Riff Raff, Columbia and Magenta join in!
We are circa 1975 again,
Circa 1975 Again!

Outtro
Yeah, we are circa (circa)
1975 again!
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Posted 15 October 2010 - 10:54 AM

Hold Your Breath

Me and Todd took Carly Jones
And her friend Sarah Drake
Up the steep and wooded cliffs
Surrounding Miller’s Lake
On that mild September day
Me, Todd and Carly dove
Off a high and rocky ledge
Ringed by autumn gold

Hold your breath
Close your eyes
Pretty soon
You will rise

Maybe it was fifty feet
Maybe it was more
It was clear she’d never been
That high above before
With the daylight fading fast
Somebody pushed too hard
Todd claims it was Carly (but)
My money’s still on Todd

Hold your breath
Close your eyes
Pretty soon
You will rise

Todd’s dressed up like Genghis Khan
Carly’s some dead queen
I’m a shadow of my former self
This haunted Halloween
It doesn’t matter what we do
The truth will all come out
Soon they’ll come to ask us
What we know about
Sarah’s drowning
Sarah’s drowning
Sarah’s drowning
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Posted 15 October 2010 - 10:55 AM

Mirror

V1
I sneak past several times a day
While you hang on your wall
You're shattered that I stay away
But frankly I'm appalled!

V2
Your presence darkens me with dread
You took my world and shook it
I thank God I'm not yet dead
But I'm starting to look it

Chorus
I'm afraid of my mirror
It shows me shocking things
I'm afraid of my mirror
The bad news that it brings

V3
My fragile ego's frightened
Your shiny truth reminds me
The clothes of youth have tightened
My days of grace behind me

Chorus
I'm afraid of my mirror
It shows me shocking things
I'm afraid of my mirror
The bad news that it brings

Bridge
Mirror, mirror lie to me
Reflect on what I used to be
Mirror, mirror make amends
Or we cannot be friends

Chorus
I'm afraid of my mirror
It shows me shocking things
I'm afraid of my mirror
And the bad news that it brings.
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Posted 18 October 2010 - 10:29 AM

Busted Flat

Verse 1:
Been rumours here of layoffs, and the rumourís coming true
They tell you it wonít happen to a good old boy like you
But I can see the writing on the wall
And I donít like the look of things at all
A man inspires confidence and I can play the part
I need to show my wife and kids that I am in good heart
But, late at night, I feel my mouth go dry
Iím scared, and I donít want to be that guy

Chorus:
The bankers get their bonuses
The trouble trickles down
The bottom of the barrelís where Iím at
An average guy, an average home, an average, little town
An average guy whoís terrified that heíll get busted flat

Verse 2:
My eldest plans on college and I promised her some cash
I never was a saver, but I have a little stashed
I always kept my promises before
Maybe I canít do that any more
My wife can see Iím troubled, so I smile at her and wink
But she knows me well enough to know the way I think
I canít protect her, like a husband should
Iím failing her, and swore I never would

Chorus:
The bankers get their bonuses
The trouble trickles down
The bottom of the barrelís where Iím at
An average guy, an average home, an average, little town
An average guy whoís terrified that heíll get busted flat

Bridge:
Anger is no answer, but Iím angry
If thereís a God, then show me that He cares
The kids are looking out for me
Thatís not how itís supposed to be
I donít recall a time I ever saw my Daddy scared

Chorus:
The bankers get their bonuses
The trouble trickles down
The bottom of the barrelís where Iím at
An average guy, an average home, an average, little town
An average guy whoís terrified that heíll get busted flat
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Posted 18 October 2010 - 10:30 AM

The Dark, Dark Side of Me

V1
A midnight stroll
Alone and cold
Afraid of who I'll be
I'm drudging down
A conclusive path
To embrace reality

V2
Afraid to go
I need to know
Are my nightmares real?
Recurring dreams
Of killing men
Buried by the hickory elm

Chorus 1
Every night I stir and fight
My dreams won't set me free
Wide awake, I prepare to meet
The dark, dark side of me

V3
Dead silence crackles
I spot a jackal
He turns in fear to run
Am I a man?
Perhaps a beast
What have I become?

V4
It's too surreal
This whole ordeal
I am the devils slave
Tokens adorn
The bloody alter
Marking the shallow grave

Chorus 2
Every night I stir and fight
My dreams won't set me free
Wide awake, I finally meet
The dark, dark side of me

Outro
Can you recall your dreams?
Do you know what they mean?
Are you prepared to see?
The monster you may be?
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Posted 18 October 2010 - 10:31 AM

Circles in the Corn

Vs
I was skinning that old buck
When the sky became on fire
I remember feeling queasy
A sharp pain behind my eyes

Then I was floating or suspended
Warm sensation and a glow
Heard some strange and distant talking
In a language I don't know
Chs
You'd never guess they'd been here
but for the circles in the corn
the scars behind our ears
and that cool electric storm
Vs
I saw a thousand colored L.E.D.'s
Although my eyes were closed
Felt awake and quite alert
But more likely comatose

Heard echoes of a spinning noise
Like a demented dentist's drill
Body swimming 'round in jello
Before everything became still

Br
I really hope you keep my scary secret
Just needed someone to tell
Now I know what its like to go to heaven
if we told them they'd make my life hell

Chs
You'd never guess they'd been here
but for the circles in the corn
The scars behind our ears
and that cool electric storm
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Posted 18 October 2010 - 10:37 AM

Crawling Out of The Darkness

Crawling out of the darkness
Searching for your dreams
Call me out baby
I will listen for your screams

Looking like an angel at a bloody massacre
Hoping for a saint who will offer up a cure

Crawling out of the darkness
Seeking out some light
Wrestle with your demons
You just might win this fight

If you keep your promise
As you utter out your vow
You will find that this life will give you
All you need right now

Crawling out of the darkness
Dreaming
Crawling out of the darkness
Screaming
Crawling out of the darkness
Light it
Crawling out of the darkness
Fight it

Crawling out of the darkness
Crawling out of the darkness
Crawling out of the darkness
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Posted 18 October 2010 - 03:23 PM

This contest is now closed for entries. Let the scoring begin.

All members are allowed to score the lyrics; all contestants must provide scores or their lyric will be disqualified.

- Vote for all lyrics except your own on a scale of 1 to 10
- No half marks. Your score must be a whole number
- Your lyric gets the average score you gave the others

Please PM me your votes by October 21. The winners will be announced on the 22th.

Here are the lyrics:

A Ghost of Me
Monsters
Our Heads were Smashed
Southern Ghost
Ghost Lover
Circa 1975 Again
Hold your Breath
Mirror
Busted Flat
The Dark, Dark side of me
Circles in the Corn
Crawling out of the Darkness
The forest would be silent if only the best birds sang.

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Posted 22 October 2010 - 12:49 PM

We have our winners:

1st Place
Hold Your Breath - Jonie

2nd Place
Ghost Lover - Len

3rd Place
Mirror - Starsinmyeyes

Thanks to everyone who entered.

Here are all the lyrics titles, who wrote them, and their total score:

Hold your, Breath Jonie - 77
Ghost Lover, Len - 76
Mirror, Stars in my eyes - 75
Busted Flat, Alistair - 74
A Ghost of Me, Mr. Fitz - 73
Circa 1975 Again, Kimberlyinnc - 71
The Dark, Dark Side of Me, Dottie - 71
Crawling out of the Darkness, RKG - 69
Circles in the Corn, Marty100 - 68
Southern Ghost, blue_kola - 67
Our Heads were Smashed, Greybeard - 66
Monsters, feegis - 65
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Posted 22 October 2010 - 01:42 PM

Congratulations Jonie! I thought your lyric was very good even though I didn’t have it in 1st place I did rate it highly with an 8.

Congrats to you too len, I had your Ghost Lover in a three way tie for 2nd place with a 9, so I thought highly of it too.

Tracy,I had your Mirror rated a 9 also, I had such a hard time voting this month with so many really good lyrics!

Mr. Fitz, I had you in 1st place with a 10! I loved your Ghost of Me. I thought it was excellent!

Kim, you had the other 9 on my list with Circa 1975 I thought it was very creative and very well written.

Alistair, I like your Busted Flat and RKG, Marty, Blue-kola, Greybeard, and Feegis they were all good, not a bad one in the bunch. If I were to be completely honest mine would be in last spot and still in good company:)

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Posted 22 October 2010 - 03:14 PM

Well done, all who placed!

I had Jonie out ahead by a country mile, so no surprises about the winner :)
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Posted 22 October 2010 - 05:50 PM

Well Done Jonie!!! Had you down as my favourite lyric as well so many congrats!!

Thanks Dottie for the 10! Quite happy with my first outing in a Muse contest so a ten just makes me :D !!

Well done everyone!

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Posted 22 October 2010 - 06:46 PM

Hi everyone! Congratulations jonie your lyric gave me some serious chills, it was the eeriest one of the lot, and I was absolutely haunted by...

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Hold your breath
Close your eyes
Pretty soon
You will rise
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Len, I gave yours a 10! I thought it really tapped into the theme of the month and it was heaps of fun to boot!
Marty100, I thought your Circles in the Corn was really well written, and I enjoyed your fresh take on the theme.

Truth is you all rated highly this month, the entries really were hard to separate, and I didn't score anyone lower than a 7! What a great contest. You guys and gals sure know your stuff :D !
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Posted 22 October 2010 - 07:27 PM

Congratulations Len and Starsinmyeyes.

I had Busted Flat (surprised it didn't do better), Mirror, and Crawling Out of the Darkness in my top three spots, in that order. I scored the rest pretty much equally.

I don't think I've ever seen such close scores in a contest. A helluva battle!

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Posted 22 October 2010 - 10:20 PM

Congratulations to everyone this month. Every song was nicely written and I was happy to be there with all that talent! The scores didn't mean much they were all winners!

May I suggest to Neal that we set some guidence/criteria on the scoreing? There are so many variables in a song, I scored these on originality, theme (how it met the scary theme), form of lyric (meter, rhyme structure etc), emotion (did it move me) and clarity (easy of understanding the story and point). I know there is a "do I like this" score but that may not reflect the true quality of the song. Just a suggestion.
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Posted 22 October 2010 - 11:17 PM

Figures - the first time all the scores are posted, mine comes in dead last. :P

I like seeing all the scores, though.

Congratulations to all the winners!

I am always impressed with the writing in these contests, especially when it's done on cue. Very good writing, though the results did not come out necessarily the way I voted. I had Busted Flat as my number one pick.

Nice job, everybody. Fun stuff.

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Posted 23 October 2010 - 06:24 AM

View PostMarty100, on 23 October 2010 - 04:20 AM, said:

May I suggest to Neal that we set some guidence/criteria on the scoreing? There are so many variables in a song, I scored these on originality, theme (how it met the scary theme), form of lyric (meter, rhyme structure etc), emotion (did it move me) and clarity (easy of understanding the story and point). I know there is a "do I like this" score but that may not reflect the true quality of the song. Just a suggestion.

The thing is, Marty, it's pretty much impossible to legislate for the way people score (because it is, ultimately, a subjective decision). Once you start setting variables to score against, people can become anal about how much weight to give to each variable.

Personally, I keep it simple. Does the lyric say anything, and does it do so well? Does the lyric flow and could it be a song? If there is a theme, does it meet the requirement? In this case, I think every lyric did, so this wasn't a factor in my scoring (though some were more original in their use of the theme than others).

In this particular contest, I suspect that the contestants were the only voters (judging by the overall scores, which would provide Jonie's winning lyric with an average score of 7, and I doubt that it scored lower than that, which it would have to have done if there were more voters). As the scoring came out so close, it only takes a single voter to score a lyric with a low score to move it a few places downward. We can get different results when non-contestant voters join in. As an aside, I sometimes wish we could generate enough voters to make it possible to only have non-contestant voters, but that is, sadly, not possible.

I like the way that the Song Contests provide the list of scores received. That way, you can see whether a "middling" score score was considered by all to generally mediocre or whether some people liked your entry a lot while some didn't like it at all - these two scenarios could end up with the same score, but provide very different feedback, in my view. I've asked Neal to let me know the scores I received because I find this information useful. Maybe you would too?
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Posted 23 October 2010 - 04:03 PM

Here are all the individual scores. One contestant did not supply scores, but their lyric was not in contention anyway.

Hold your Breath: 8 6 6 6 5 5 8 9 8 6 10 = 77
Ghost Lover: 6 6 7 6 7 4 10 6 9 7 8 = 76
Mirror 8 8 6 5 7 7 8 5 9 6 6 = 75
Busted Flat 7 9 5 7 6 8 7 5 6 7 7 = 74
A Ghost of Me 7 7 8 5 7 4 8 5 10 5 7 = 73
Circa 1975 Again 6 6 6 6 6 5 7 6 9 5 9 = 71
The Dark, Dark side of me7 8 8 5 6 4 7 4 8 7 7 = 71
Crawling out of the Darkness 7 6 8 6 5 6 7 4 7 6 7 = 69
Circles in the Corn 7 5 6 5 8 5 9 4 6 6 7 = 68
Southern Ghost 6 8 7 5 6 4 8 6 7 5 5 = 67
Our Heads were Smashed 6 6 7 5 7 5 7 47 5 7 = 66
Monsters 6 7 6 6 5 4 7 5 7 7 5 = 65

Marty, we've tried many different scoring systems over the years. This one seems to be work the best. It's not perfect but it seems to give everyone the same fair shot.

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Posted 23 October 2010 - 07:27 PM

Hey Neal,

Unless it's not something you want to do, I'd kind of like to see all the individual scores like that every month. It's interesting to see how voting comes in.

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Posted 23 October 2010 - 08:36 PM

Congrats Jonie for adding to your ever growing collection of First Place Marks! :P

And to Len for 2nd place and another high placement for Stars! Congrats!! Len and Stars, I Had both of your lyrics as tied for 2nd place.

My personal fav. was..Marty's
Circles in the Corn- I guess because it was unusual, and sounded scary and was full of fear, scary images. It seemed to flow well to my ears too.

I found all the lyrics to be interesting takes on being scared, from UFO's to losing your livelyhood, to losing love, to being a ghost of oneself, loving a ghost, afraid of aging, a drowning and the way it affected the ones involved, etc... and hopefully my little addition to the brew, my odd take on Rocky Horror Picture show. :blink: :rolleyes:


Thanks Dottie for your kind words about Circa 1975 Again. I was not completely sure everyone would understand what it was about, if there are some out there that have never seen Rocky Horror Picture Show, if not, then it would have been very confusing, I am sure.

Congrats again, :) guys and gals. Unlike Alistair, I didn't feel that one lyric in particular was a country mile ahead of the others or was I sure of who would place first. ;) JMHO I felt there were good merits in each lyric. I had quite a few tied with the same scores.

Thanks Neal for running the show again!!!!

And...just for note, since it was mentioned, I like learning my scores, It helps me figure out how it was received, I always ask afterwards.

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Posted 24 October 2010 - 03:36 AM

Well done Jonie, I've been pipped to the post yet again :)

Busted Flat was my top pick - I couldn;t gues it was yours Alistair but a great piece with a strong chorus. I had four others in 2nd place.

Feegis, there is a scoring guide that a number of people have used in the past. I use it as a guide for my scores. You can find it here: Lyric contest rules. Hope it helps.

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