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The first song you ever wrote? Or the first one you recorded?

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Posted 22 September 2009 - 10:11 PM

I propose that here we post the first song we ever wrote or recorded (or both!). If you're a lyricist, post the lyrics. If you're a musician, post what scribblings or recordings of it you still have. Don't be embarrassed! This is purely for fun, and we all have to write bad ones before we can start writing good ones :). Please note that a recording of your first song doesn't have to be the first recording you made, as the one I'm posting is probably the third or so revision.

So, I haven't been able to play guitar for a while due to wrist pain, and I've been going nuts. I'm bored, and in that boredom I happened to stumble upon an old (the first) song I wrote, probably when I was 17. It's a very weird (and not very good :) song, but when I listened to it, I had a sort of cool feeling. I like to think I've grown a bit as a songwriter, yet I hear attempts at things that I still attempt today. Some of what I forgot about it even surprised me when I heard it again (the instrumental section wasn't too bad!).

To kick things off, here is simultaneously my first song and the first I recorded (though this isn't the first recording). It's called "Daisy Stains" and it certainly is a strange little thing, put together in the FruityLoops trial after toying with chords on the guitar for some weeks. I still remember how excited I was that I actually managed to finish a song! The link is the awful PureVolume page I put together for myself back in the day too, for sake of authenticity and hopefully to help all you feel comfortable posting your first stuff :D.

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Whimsical scales
And fairy tales
Shooting through
My head

Spinning tops
And dancing mops
From a childhood
Long dead

How I miss you all
How I feel so tall
How I wish
I had never left
You

Choochoo trains
And daisy stains
In the yard
Long ago

Lego bricks
And pick-up sticks
In the place
I called home

How I miss you all
How I feel so tall
How I wish
I had never left
You

All so pure
And beautifully set
All so new
In silhouettes
All so bright
Like a shining star
All so far
From who you are
Now


Feel free to share a laugh with me after you hear it. I certainly couldn't help it when I listened :).

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Posted 26 September 2009 - 08:33 PM

I recorded some stuff on tapes years ago (all lost to posterity).

My first song posted anywhere was this one (I think).

God, the recording is bad.. as is the performance!! Mind you, I don't hate the lyric or the idea.. I should redo it!

Solstice

We stayed awake all night to watch the sparking of the day,
Saw darkness softly fading into lighter shades of grey.
Stonehenge stood before us as the first touch of the sun
Eased the chill and whispered that our new lives had begun.
And even though I was only seventeen,
Some magic in the solstice seemed to wash my spirit clean,
And every breath I took I was breathing life anew.
There was magic in that solstice as the sun was breaking through.

Our backs were to the embers. We were facing the unknown.
We may have been together, but we faced it all alone.
Struck dumb, we watched the sun disperse the mist across the plain
And swore our lives would never, ever be the same again.
And even though we were only seventeen,
And thought weíd shared a vision that the ancients must have seen,
A panoply of futures came streaming from the blue,
With magic in the choices and the chances to renew.

When life is not worth living
And Iím prompted to complain,
When I feel my spirit
Can no longer take the strain,
When I canít see the sun because
Iím blinded by the rain,
That solstice seems to find me
It reaches out to find me
It reaches out to find me
And Iím seventeen
Again.

I was changed forever more than thirty years ago.
I never lost the wonder of the boy of who stood alone,
Enraptured by a sunrise and the beauty of the stones.
Thereís magic in each sunrise and it feels like coming home.

When life is not worth living
And Iím prompted to complain,
When I feel my spirit
Can no longer take the strain,
When I canít see the sun because
Iím blinded by the rain,
It reaches out to find me
It reaches out to find me
It reaches out to find me
And Iím seventeen
Again.
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Posted 28 September 2009 - 11:54 PM

Gotta say Al, that's a pretty good song you got there. I hope you work it over again, I hear some really cool things that could come of that!

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Posted 11 May 2010 - 01:19 PM

A month ago I just out-of-the-blue started coming up with these odd rhythmic, rhyming thoughts and wrote them down and they sounded like song words. Now I can't seem to stop. This is one of the first ones:

I need a hypnotist
to help me forget about the things I miss
and all the fun that I'll never have.
The future's gonna be just like the present
Won't be great but it won't be too unpleasant
and soon I'm gonna be too old to care.

This is the song of the misanthrope
I wanna sit at home and smoke my dope
close the curtains and give up hope
in the flicker of the teevee in my underwear.

I need a hypnotist
to help me find that ignorant bliss
that comes with knowing that I'm never wrong.
I'm never bored safe and smug behind my door
Don't have any friends and I don't want any more
'cause people are nasty and selfish anyway.

This is the song...
...flicker of the teevee eatin my sour grapes.

This is one I started today:

I read in a magazine
that you hate the color green
so I slipped into my best,
tightest emerald green dress
and went to hear you sing.

(chorus)
I know you saw me, I know you saw me.
That's all I want--
to be in your mind,
because you're in mine
all the time, everywhere.
If we never meet, if we never speak,
I don't really care.
I want to be in your mind, be in your mind
all the time, everywhere.

I heard it somewhere
you hate girls with short hair
so i lopped off my mane
it caused me great pain
and went to hear you play.
(chorus)

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Posted 11 May 2010 - 04:04 PM

I have the first lyric I wrote floating around somewhere, it's called "Don't Let Angels Fall", I know when I look back at it, I can remember the moment I was writing it...on the bus coming home from drum lessons downtown and am still pretty impressed with myself as it's quite good for a first lyric. I have many since then that aren't very good :lol:

The earliest song I've recorded that I've kept around is this one...

Mean It Like You Say It

The rest are long since deleted either from Soundclick or when I formatted my digital recorder out of frustration. Or have been lost since moving from my mom's house.
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Posted 02 January 2011 - 11:02 AM

The first rhymes I wrote as a lad of 7 or 8 years were in German and they were poems inspirated by Johann Wolfgang von Goethe and Friedrich Schiller... Sometimes when I read them I am surprised how little my emotions have changed from then until now and how much I see also there what is still topical for me today... I started writing lyrics much later and now I prefer writing lyrics, once because of their "living element" (= the music) and 2nd because one can reach much more people and touch them emotionally in that way... in fact, I cannot remember any more what was the first piece I ever wrote

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Posted 12 January 2011 - 03:50 PM

The first song I recorded was, I believe, this instrumental I wrote:
http://soundcloud.co.../pressedflowers

@FunkDaddy/Mark: I like the phrase "Mean it like you say it" a lot.

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Posted 13 January 2011 - 12:58 PM

The first song I ever wrote was when I was a little girl of about 8 years old. It was called 'I Want to go Somewhere'. The lyrics made no sense whatsoever eg. 'Where the kangaroo knows just what to do...from the mountains to the deep blue sea sea sea'. I think I was influenced by Judy Garland's 'Somewhere over the rainbow' at the time. I had a few other songs in my songbook about teachers and bears, but stopped writing altogether until my mid twenties, when the break-up of a very turbulent relationship seemed to trigger an outpouring of songs. 'Hard Life' was the name of the first one. More of an anti-love song.

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Posted 13 January 2011 - 03:20 PM

So I'm not the only one who finds songs come more naturally when depressed?

This explains why I haven't actually written any new songs recently.

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Posted 13 January 2011 - 04:51 PM

For sure! Any time I write a happy song, it sounds insincere and cheesy. I don't really do happy I'm afraid! Angry and depressed is more my thing.lol.

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Posted 13 January 2011 - 09:29 PM

View PostDeeDee, on 13 January 2011 - 04:51 PM, said:

I don't really do happy I'm afraid! Angry and depressed is more my thing.lol.


I couldn't help but notice, this probably explains all your interests. :lol:

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Posted 14 January 2011 - 06:51 AM

Mine is called Lonely Night. It was the first full song i wrote and also the first one I recorded. I had the chord progression forever but couldn't come with the lyrics. I somehow came up with the first 2 lines late one night and then turned into a story. It's a happy little tune!! its about a guy who is so low and fed up with the world he's murdered his wife before killing himself as he thinks there's got to be a better life after this one!!

The recording is poor, it started out as a rehearsal with the band - but i've then added overdubs and backwards guitar and stuff. I still like the song and there's something about the feel of it i'm not sure i'll ever be able to recreate. So for all it's shortcomings i still like it.

it's the 7th song in the player from this link

http://www.blindcomm...er.net/home.cfm

here's the lyric

As the rain falls down and soaks my skin
Another brandy, please cleanse my sin
As I walk away from the scene
Remembering you
You donít remember me

All those things we never had
All those times when we were sad

Chorus
Take my body, take my soul
So low, Iíve never felt so low

Middle
Itís over now and you are gone
Another place
Itís time to move on


Iíll be with you soon as the rope gets tight
I donít want to have a lonely night
Darkness approaches and the rain ends
Remembering family, remembering friends

Chorus

Together again in another world
With whatever that entails

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Posted 14 January 2011 - 07:14 AM

View PostPaddy O, on 13 January 2011 - 09:29 PM, said:

View PostDeeDee, on 13 January 2011 - 04:51 PM, said:

I don't really do happy I'm afraid! Angry and depressed is more my thing.lol.


I couldn't help but notice, this probably explains all your interests. :lol:


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Posted 14 January 2011 - 03:49 PM

You may be on to something there...

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Posted 15 January 2011 - 03:22 PM

The first song I wrote was called 'At the Zoo' when I was 3. My dad set up a tape recorder and told me to make
up a song. It went:

There are bears at the zooooooooo,
There are giraffes at the zooooooo,
There are....uummm...tigers at the zoooooooo,

And it went on for a while like that until I ran out of animals that I knew. I'm sure my parents needed an asprin that night.
I listened to the tape a few years ago - too funny.

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Posted 15 January 2011 - 03:45 PM

That's hilarious! And awfully cute...

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Posted 16 January 2011 - 04:24 AM

OK, I'm willing to participate... kinda.

I never recorded this "song". I don't recall the verses, although the melody for the chorus is still clear in my head. I don't think it was the first song I ever wrote, but it was almost definitely the worst song I ever wrote. Here are the lyrics for the chorus:

Happy everyday to you
and if you're ever feeling blue
just remember that I love you
Happy everyday to you.

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Posted 18 January 2011 - 08:47 PM

OMG, Simon. You probably wrote it back in the early 70's - inspired by someone like Bobby Sherman or the Turtles.

This wasn't my first lyric (Long gone and forgotten) but it was definitely written in the first couple of months that followed. It came to me while dozing off one night and kept me up until I finished it. It's a silly little thing but I must admit, it's the first thing I'd written, up to that point, that I actually liked.

Ride the Pony

When I was just a little girl
I loved my pony best
I'd ride my pony all day long
Never giving it a rest
Mama would always nag me
Stop riding that pony 'round
Said “Girl, you're gonna ride that pony
Ride it right into the ground”

Jonie, don't ride that pony
Jonie, don't ride so fast
When you got yourself a good thing
You gotta make it last

I was no more than seventeen
Still pretty lean and green
When I caught my parents doing
Well, you know what I mean
Mama was riding Daddy
Daddy was holding tight
And I could see poor Daddy
Wouldn't make it through the night

Honey, come ride your pony
Honey, don't ride so fast
When you got yourself a good thing
You gotta make it last

Now and then I'm all grown up
I get what life's about
And every time I get the chance
I let it all hang out
I get myself a stallion
To keep me satisfied
And when I mount he shows how much
He loves to watch me ride

Jonie, come ride your pony
Jonie, don't ride too fast
When you got yourself a good thing
You gotta make it last
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Posted 20 January 2011 - 01:12 PM

One summer when I was a kid, there was a bird living in our neighbourhood that couldn't fly. The bird didn't have a tail, so it just flopped and fluttered around. We tried to catch it, but never could. I imagine that a cat got the tail in the first place, and then another cat probably finished him off, but in the meantime I named him "Bird Nail" so that I could write and sing this little ditty:

"Bird Nail, the bird with (pause) no tail!"

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Posted 20 January 2011 - 01:21 PM

View Postjonie, on 18 January 2011 - 08:47 PM, said:

OMG, Simon. You probably wrote it back in the early 70's - inspired by someone like Bobby Sherman or the Turtles.

This wasn't my first lyric (Long gone and forgotten) but it was definitely written in the first couple of months that followed. It came to me while dozing off one night and kept me up until I finished it. It's a silly little thing but I must admit, it's the first thing I'd written, up to that point, that I actually liked.

Ride the Pony

When I was just a little girl
I loved my pony best
I'd ride my pony all day long
Never giving it a rest
Mama would always nag me
Stop riding that pony 'round
Said ďGirl, you're gonna ride that pony
Ride it right into the groundĒ

Jonie, don't ride that pony
Jonie, don't ride so fast
When you got yourself a good thing
You gotta make it last

I was no more than seventeen
Still pretty lean and green
When I caught my parents doing
Well, you know what I mean
Mama was riding Daddy
Daddy was holding tight
And I could see poor Daddy
Wouldn't make it through the night

Honey, come ride your pony
Honey, don't ride so fast
When you got yourself a good thing
You gotta make it last

Now and then I'm all grown up
I get what life's about
And every time I get the chance
I let it all hang out
I get myself a stallion
To keep me satisfied
And when I mount he shows how much
He loves to watch me ride

Jonie, come ride your pony
Jonie, don't ride too fast
When you got yourself a good thing
You gotta make it last


I canít say how many times Iíve heard songwriting is not something youíre born with, itís learned and has to be developed. Well if this is your first lyric, Iím questioning that! You seem to have been born with it. Just an observation. B)

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Posted 21 January 2011 - 07:22 PM

Thank you, Dottie, but like I mentioned, it wasn't exactly my first lyric (maybe my 9th or 10th) and it was one of those lyrics that came through my consciousness complete with a melody. I didn't have a whole lot to do with it.
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Posted 28 January 2011 - 06:40 PM

This was my first lyric - which, not surprisingly, coincided with my first heartbreak when I was but a lad of 16, 26 years ago.


Away From Me

Maybe I brought it upon myself
Or it was just a long time coming
Should I go out and try to catch her
Or should I just let her keep on running
All that I had hoped for vanished
From my crazy world of dreams
Maybe I thought I should change her
As absurd as that now seems

(chorus)
And away from me she's going
She ain't ever coming back
We made a lifelong deal
Now she wants to break the pact

I think of all the plans we made
And how they just seemed to fall apart
And now there's not a chance for them
But they'll always be in my heart
She said it's for the best of us
But I can't believe it's true
Though the longer we stayed together
The more the cancer grew

(chorus)

Maybe someday I'll find the answers
But right now the answers aren't clear
And though I might have willed all this
It's still something that I feared

(chorus)

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Posted 29 January 2011 - 01:23 AM

I wrote poetry as a kid, but it didnít occur to me to try to write songs until much later. My first song was an embarrassingly earnest and uplifting folky thing called ďThe Spark WithinĒ (oh, dear). Song number two came about a week later, and after all these years I still like it. Iím working on a website for my music, and this one will be there.


LATTER DAYS OF SPRING

In the still of early morning in the Latter Days of Spring,
When the sky was deep as water and the flowers seemed to sing,
She felt the season's promise of golden summer light,
Of days of ripened sweetness, of caresses in the night.

And as she dreamed of summer and the fullness it would bring,
She danced with girlish pleasure in the Latter Days of Spring.

But when the summer sun came,it burned away her heart.
And when the summer storms came, they blew her dreams apart.
She only hoped for ending her season in the sun.
For drier days and cooler nights, for summer to be done.

And when she left her summer, no comfort could she bring.
She thought with bittersweetness of the Latter Days of Spring.

Then all at once the autumn sky became a water blue
As in his voice she heard the song of spring begin anew.
Now in his arms she dances in that distant early morn.
Though every season passes, the spring can be reborn

Though autumn's winds are blowing and soon must winter bring,
With his love she still is dancing in the Latter Days of Spring.
Yes, it's always early morning in the Latter Days of Spring.
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Posted 30 January 2011 - 01:42 PM

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I confess to liking folky things. The more earnest and uplifting, the better. This was your first lyric? Wow. Some lovely phrasing that showcases your poetic roots. You seem to have had no problem making the transition from poetry to lyricwriting if this piece is any indicator.

the sky was deep as water

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Posted 30 January 2011 - 09:56 PM

Joni, you're very kind. As I said, this is actually lyric # 2 - the first one will not see the light of day even on the friendly confines of Muse's Muse. :)

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Posted 31 January 2011 - 07:07 AM

View Postscubed, on 29 January 2011 - 06:23 AM, said:

Song number two came about a week later, and after all these years I still like it.


And I can see why! That's seriously good - definitely a keeper! :)
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Posted 01 February 2011 - 08:32 AM

I am still writing it :D

The first first song I wrote was for a variety performance that I had to perform in a few years ago at a local theatre. From memory the lyrics went something like

I go to work,
to pay the bills
He thinks I'm smart
but he hasn't seen my skills

Oh I can cook,
but I cannot type
I have to find the keys
before I .....I strike

Oh I am stressed,
so much to do
The networks down
and my paypals overdue

If I don't check this basket out
from the Tesco's site
I'll miss the 2 for 1
on the brussel sprouts

All this email,
selling this and that
I don't need a diet pill
do I look fat

What's this now,
it's flashing red at me
I've won the jackpot prize
on the national lottery

It's 10 past nine
Time for a break
I'll be back in 5
I've been up since 8

There was a horrible dance and an awful jazzy leotard costume costume thing that went with it too.... so embarrasing lol. Never again :D
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Posted 01 February 2011 - 11:27 PM

Hey, nice thread idea... just so happens i stumbled upon the first poem i think i ever wrote. About the girl i had a crush on in high school. I can still remember the exact first moment i ever saw her, our freshman year, as if it was yesterday (cliche)... and i wrote this about her then.

perhaps a little cheesy, like you might expect from a teenage boy... i seemed to be experimenting with vowels... sort of an assonance? This one is so old, i don't even have an electronic copy of it. At 21 words - not only my first but my shortest... i was much less verbose back then...

(BTW, second poem i ever wrote is Nightmares over on the Artists' Cafe... rough, but kind of neat to read after so many years... wrote it after watching the post-Rodney King riots on the news and wondering what the heck was happening to everyone...)

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Posted 25 February 2012 - 09:11 AM

It was 1960, and I was eight. The melody on this one practically wrote itself!

God bless John Kennedy
Man that I love
Stand beside him
And guide him
Through the night with the lights from above.

From the mountains
To the prairie
To the oceans
Every state
God bless John Kennedy
My candidate
God bless John Kennedy
My candidate

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Posted 25 February 2012 - 05:37 PM

View PostJoan, on 25 February 2012 - 09:11 AM, said:

It was 1960, and I was eight. The melody on this one practically wrote itself!


Right up there with the original, Joan. :lol:
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Posted 27 February 2012 - 07:11 PM

great idea for a thread! Just dusted off the old print outs, found some lyrics that i posted on the original muse (spotted some familiar names too!)
I am thoroughly ashamed of 16 year old me for posting some of these and I apologise to anyone who had to find something positive to say about them - in fact Im not gonna post any of the shameful ones again apart from this chorus:
This is a song about meaning
this is a song about words
this is a song about feelings
this song is more than words
The meaning is in the words
the words are on the page
cos if your feeling the feeling you're feeling inside
open up let love be your guide.

Cheesy as hell and very shocking!

I did find the first song I remember finishing:

Sarah Lane (life aint ordinary)
Love is a funny game for sarah lane
shes gone insane tonight
shes copped off with every guy in school
college too, yeah
They think shes a whore but shes just an ordinary girl
tonight

Rooms spinning round and round
shes hit the ground yeah
she wont wake up till 7 oclock tonight
Its only 1AM and shes on the floor like an ordinary girl
tonight.

And whether its in life or love
Sarah dont have the brains to get above
shes got to get away from her dreary days tonight

Life aint ordinary at all
you've got to keep on going if you fall
cos tonight or any other day
aint ordinary yeah
cos life aint ordinary for anyone at all

She listens to music on her own
shes all alone tonight
she walks into the busy town lost not found yeah
and she sits in the corner on her own
like an ordinary girl
tonight

aint i think its true to say
that sarah's life has gone astray
shes left in the hole of her dreary days tonight

Life aint ordinary at all
you've got to keep on going if you fall
cos tonight or any other day
aint ordinary yeah
cos life aint ordinary for anyone at all

Love was not a game for sarah lane
she went insane tonight
she took her life on the college roof yeah
and now they all know that she was no ordianry girl at all

Life aint ordinary at all
you've got to keep on going if you fall
cos tonight or any other day
aint ordinary yeah
cos life aint ordinary for anyone at all

at all, at all, at all
life aint ordinary for anyone at all

at all, at all, at all
life aint ordinary for anyone at all

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Posted 01 March 2012 - 07:46 PM

Oh you mean the first song you ever plagiarized :blink: , which happened to be the first song I ever tried to write. :o
This is a story that needs a little background.

I started my musical career at the age of 10 playing trumpet in the school orchestra.
That was short lived as my technique for spitting into the mouthpiece :ph34r: would hurt my jaw after only a half hour of playing.
Coming from an Italian family, my uncle had an extra accordion laying around so I took it up.
That eventually grew into playing a Cordovox (poor manís organ) since we couldnít afford a B3 ^_^ which I played right through high school.

I was lucky to have grown up in the suburbs of NYC and also lucky enough to have witnessed a recording session at the then famous Waldorf Astoria studios or RCA Victor in 1963.
The band that was playing that session was called The Three Suns and I still have the LP they were working on called ďA Swinginí ThingĒ..
I remember to this day listening to the sweet sounds of a B3 organ playing Sweet Georgia Brown.
And I also remember sending a letter to the arranger of the project, Roy Glover, who was nice enough to reply thanking me for the kind words.

The gentleman that invited me to the session was also kind enough to take my first song that I had written and give it to Morty Nevins, the accordion player for The Three Suns. :huh:
It turned out that the song that I had written sounded way to much like a song that made the Suns famous, called ďTwilight TimeĒ. :ph34r:
Since I was just a kid, they were very polite in explaining that my song was a bit to close to sounding like their song.

But I did go on to write another song a year later (around 1965), of which I still have my manuscript (I was so neat in those days. Nothing like my chicken scratch from today <_< ).
This songís intro also resembles one from another group that I enjoyed listening to back then ďFerry Cross the MercyĒ by Gerry and the Pacemakers.
While the chords in the intro are exactly the same, thankfully the melody did take it in a different direction.
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Posted 05 March 2012 - 12:36 AM

Hey there........my first recording is something I did only a couple of years ago called, "You're Still With Me" Hearing my music for the first time thru a head set was mind blowing.....and still is!! http://soundclick.co...cfm?id=10260573

However, some 100 songs earlier, I wrote my first song while in High school called, "Always On My Mind" I am still partial to this song, as it remained my Mom's favorite.


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I found a letter on my bed
I read it thru and what it said
Would break the heart of any man
If sheíd only understandÖ
Ö That the other girls
Didnít mean so much
The way we had it
The way we touched
I never realized any wrong
But now I do now that sheís gone

But she knows that I do love her
And Iím always thinking of her
Why did she leave me behind?
With her picture in my hand
Thinking back trying to understand
I love her so; sheís always on my mind

Well, I tried to get in touch with her
But when I did she had no words
To explain a reason why she left me
Just left the note that left me empty

But she knows that I do love her
And Iím always thinking of her
Why did she leave me behind?
With her picture in my hand
Thinking back trying to understand
I love her so; sheís always on my mind
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I don't really write songs. They write me.

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Posted 05 March 2012 - 12:35 PM

I've told this story before.

The first song I wrote was called Changes, and I co-wrote it with a friend when I was 15. We had a country duo and the song was heavily influenced my Merle Haggard. The melody is nice, but the lyric is really, really bad....

Sitting, thinkin' 'bout you all the time
Wishing I could get you off my mind
But your memories continue to linger on
Like the words to an old familiar song.

And the song started with "I Love you"
The chorus started when our love grew
The second verse started when you made me cry
And the song ended when our love died


When I met you, I knew you were for me
And a love so strong was bound to be
And as sure as the moon comes out at night
There grew a love that was so right

But changes in you caused changes in me
And the end of our love was bound to be
Now your memories continue to linger on
Like the words to this old familiar song.

And the song started with "I Love you"
The chorus started when our love grew
The second verse started when you made me cry
And the song ended when our love died


Now here's the kicker. A year after we wrote this, we auditioned for a television show. It was called Tim Daniel's Easy Country show, broadcast by Global Television out of Toronto. We auditioned with this song, and got selected for the show. And that's how I ended up performing the very first song I ever wrote -- as bad as it was -- on a national television show, while I was still in High School.

My musical career was all downhill from there.

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Posted 06 March 2012 - 06:24 PM

I wrote "Serenade of the Frog" on the mandolin, in the key of G, I think. It is the most awful song ever written. Interestingly, my chorus is almost note for note the chorus to Tommy Roe's "Sweet Pea". Since I wrote my song before Tommy's song was recorded and I am sure that Tommy never heard it, I guess it is an example of bad minds thinking alike.

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Posted 25 March 2012 - 07:13 AM

What an interesting thread. :D

I wrote my first lyric when I was ten years old. The words I made up were to part of Tchaikovsky's Piano Concerto No. 1. (I know, I know. I was a weird kid. :P)
The words were:

I'll be loving you eternally
With a love that's true eternally
We will smile and never will we wear a frown
We will look up and ne'er fall down

There will come a time
When all is peace
And a time when all
The fighting cease....

(Don't recall the rest)

Amazing that I remember those lines after all this time. Probably because they're so cringeworthy. :rolleyes:

I still don't know to play an instrument, and rely on fine (and living) composers for the music magic. :)
I hope, though, that the calibre of the lyrics has improved. ;)

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Posted 26 March 2012 - 03:38 PM

The first MUSIC I ever wrote was an irritating tune I figured out how to play on a Conn Chord Organ when I was 7 or so.

The first song I ever wrote, I was around 12 and had been playing guitar for a couple years... it was some kind of folkie "rambling man who has seen a lot of hard times" thing. Oddly, I can't recall a word of it, except I know it mentioned some city names, but I could probably pick up a guitar right now and play the chords with only a couple of stumbles. To my perpetual shame, I recorded it on my Dad's Compact Cassette machine, and he tells me he still has that tape. Thank Bog and All His Holy Angels nobody I know has a cassette player anymore!!

The second song was a love ballad for a girl I knew, or wanted to know. Outrageously overblown romanticism, and I recall that that it probably sounded a lot like "Please Come To Boston." (*shudder*)

After that, I started writing rocking' "good lovin' gone bad" songs, then wrote some pretty clever stuff while I was on the road, playing solo, and then stopped for a LONG time. :)

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Posted 26 March 2012 - 07:17 PM

Despite my better judgement, Im gonna play...

I had to hit the cassettes...yeah thats right cassettes, those things between 8tracks and cd's??? and i converted to mp3.

http://soundcloud.co...urning-the-book

This is the first recording I had of a song called "Burning the Book". It was recorded in the 80's, so it comes complete with big room reverb, tape hiss and bad lyrics!!! LOL, But this is all in fun right. I'd love for a crit on this one!! maybe I should post it there... :huh:

Its amazing to see where I came from and where I am at now and how I dont settle for lyrics anymore.

Great thread...

by the way, if anyone listens to it thank you and sorry
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Posted 28 March 2012 - 04:37 PM

I wrote this a few years ago when I was seventeen, before i really had any aspiration to write songs as a hobby, it just came in my head with a melody so i wrote it down. didnt really start writing til the year after.

here is my unfinished, untitled first creation.

In a deep blue world
With starless skies above
And pretty coral reefs
Symbolizing love

There is an ugly truth
Waiting to be told
Itís dog eat dog
Their lives are all they hold

And to keep their lives
It becomes their job
And in the fields of boredom
Thatís where they lay their sod

By the coral reefs
The children play all day
As they grow apart
Problems slowly weigh

With beauty close
To everybodyís eyes
They see the ugliness
In perfect skies


it gives me headaches to read this... i was in a bad place, okay? actually the only thing i really like about this song is the melody i have in my head for it, pretty haunting

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Posted 12 May 2012 - 02:10 PM

I wrote this back in the seventies

If you think that your no good
Your no good
If you think that your great
Then your great
It's whatever you think
You can be
You can be just that
someday

If you think your a flop
And a dropout
And the world is
passing you by
You've got to get out
And get with it
You can't sit at home
and just cry

All you need
is the right motivation
To set the world
On it's toes
you've got to get out
and get with it
where that will lead
Nobody knows

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Posted 12 May 2012 - 10:11 PM

Wow, i actually did write the text to a real song! (not here unfortunately :blink: )
this was result of my ease-dropping on two carpenters :ph34r:



Fair Weather Friends

v1:
Look at you, it's been a while
Grew up from a child
In you, I see your mother's eyes
Mysterious and wild

v2:
I hear she's doing well
Got herself a brand-new life
She followed me through the gates of hell
To end up someoneís wife

v3:
Maybe this is Godís revenge
For leaving you behind
But I was living, on the fringe
A blurr now, in my mind

ch:
Farewell is easy, for
Fair weather friends
Sunshine companions they
hide when the rain begins
Put no faith in.....
Fair weather friends

short solo (G-Am-C-G)

v4:
Iím begging youíre forgiveness
Like many times before
Iím seeing the abyss now, and I
know thereís nothing more

ch:
Love life surround yourself
With people you depend
Never let yourself become
A fair weather friend

bridge:
1.
Do not despair for me
Iíve done this to myself...you see
Many people
tried to help me
2.
Iím not prepared for what will come
On that I wonít pretend
My sunshine
I'm your
Fair weather friend


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Posted 13 May 2012 - 01:32 AM

My first song/poem was called tree of life, i was 14 and it was the first piece i ever wrote. It's pretty much the exact same way it was the day i wrote it, i never revised it at all. I love it still to this day cause after this i wrote a lot of **** honestly haha and by that i mean BAD poems and songs. Like cheesy 80's pop rock bad. I see all the growth ive made and i think its great to go back and id love to hear your opinions!

We feed off the tree of life,
we are the roots that are deeply sewn,
branch off to a path our own.
seeds of life,
that learn to breed hate,
an evil we naturally create,
serenity dissapates.

This flower that beautifully matures is but an hopefull illusion,
at a glance seemingly pure,
visual lies confirm this as the cure,
to our problems long endured.
consumed only then reveals itself,
most potent poison.

Anger abundant becomes nourishment for all of us starved of love,
the scarcity of kindness and care,
any lie said as long as profit is there.
what happens,happens,
no matter the cost we later pay,
no matter what we lost along the way,
sky green,rivers run black,animals extinct,no habitat

We've harmed the tree,
tainted seeds grow into weeds,
innocence taken,
creator corrupted.
burn,burn,burn to ashes that decorate this dead world,
no remorse,no regrets,
an emotion that cannot be expressed,
for none we possess,
expressionless in the face of the horrendous crime we have committed,
to the darkest evil we have submitted.
"I've always looked for the perfect life to step into. I've taken all the paths to get where I wanted.But no matter where I go, I still come home me."

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Posted 09 April 2013 - 08:05 PM

I'm a lyricist and the first complete lyric I ever wrote was a blues entitled "Can't Understand Why".


"Can't Understand Why"


I got a woman
and she ain't right by me
I got a woman
and she ain't right by me
while I'm out workin' hard all day
my baby loves to play
I can't understand why
she treats me this way

she drive a Cadillac
she wears a pinky diamond ring
she drive a Cadillac
and wears a pinky diamond ring
to buy these things I work overtime
I'd give the girl my last dime
I can't understand why
she treats me unkind

this heartache inside me
is rumbling like thunder
I've got to do something
for she takes me under

I'm alright now
I done got me somebody new
I'm alright now
I done got me somebody new
I've been squeezing and kissing
never knew what I was missing
hope my ex- can't understand why
I ain't back from fishing
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Posted 18 September 2013 - 08:22 PM

The first song I ever wrote was written on a napkin while I took a break from bussing tables. Maybe I should write a song about writing my first song? :P

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Posted 19 September 2013 - 12:05 AM

I have a cassette of my first ten songs. I recorded it in 2001, and haven't listened to it since. I don't know if I want to.
I still play five of the songs. I don't remember which was the first, but here's one of them. Larry

One Last Kiss

(Verse)
Baby, don't hurt me.
No, don't desert me.
Baby, just hold me.
I can't believe what you just told me.

(Chorus)
I want you. I need you.
I can't live without your love.
But now you tell me your leavin' for good.

(Verse)
Baby, just kiss me,
And tell me that you'll miss me.
You say that you don't want me.
Those words will always haunt me.

(Chorus)
I want you. I need you.
I can't live without your love.
But now you tell me your leavin' for good.

(Verse)
You broke my heart into so many pieces,
It'll never be the same again.
Baby, give me one last kiss,
And always remember this.

(Chorus)
I want you. I need you.
I can't live without your love.
But now you tell me your leavin' for good.

(Outro)
You took my heart.
You took my soul.
You took it all, baby.
If it sounds good, it is good.
A smile can be contagious if you open your mind.
What am I, but an octopi.

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Posted 15 February 2014 - 04:54 PM

I was 12 years old when I jotted this down in my notebook after watching an obnoxious boy tease a girl with mild cerebral palsy during school recess. She calmly waited until he was done with his idiotic spiel, and responded with "I'm going to kick your ass".

I had to recreate this because I destroyed that piece of notebook paper I wrote it on out of fear of getting in trouble if a teacher or my parents were to discover it. The cheesy tune still rings in my head.


"That Girl's Got Class"
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That girl with CP's got class

She's gonna kick your ass

You bullies got nerve,

but you'll get whatcha deserve

a lesson from a girl with class.



We're gonna laugh when she kicks your ass.

Ha, haha, ha, we're gonna laugh

Ha, haha, ha, we're gonna laugh

when she kicks your ass.

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Posted 17 February 2014 - 11:42 PM

Skin on fire, heart sapphire
Desire, smoke me in your dire
'Cause you make me smile
Yeah, you make me smile

Sex and aggression
Tell me your obsessions
What really makes you strong?
Yeah, what really makes you strong?
Can we get along? Come along, come along

Yeah, you can suck my blood
You can still enjoy the drugs
You can do the things you love
'Cause you're a capital dog
Yeah, you're a vampire

Make me insane, play those games
If my heart starts to rain, I won't be ashamed (I'm restrained)
'Cause you make me smile
Yeah, you make me smile

Feelings and emotions
Tell me your obsessions
What really makes you weak?
Or, is that ancient Greek? (God, you're such a freak!)

Yeah, you can suck my blood
You can still enjoy the drugs
You can do the things you love
'Cause you're a capital dog
Yeah, you're a vampire

Don't you worry, don't say sorry
Throw me to the wolves, have them choking on my pulse
Drop the damn facade, 'cause hell is empty anyway

Yeah, you can suck my blood
You can still enjoy the drugs
You can do the things you love
'Cause you're a capital dog
Yeah, you're a vampire

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Posted 18 February 2014 - 08:25 AM

View PostAlistair S, on 26 September 2009 - 08:33 PM, said:

I recorded some stuff on tapes years ago (all lost to posterity).

My first song posted anywhere was this one (I think).

God, the recording is bad.. as is the performance!! Mind you, I don't hate the lyric or the idea.. I should redo it!

Solstice

We stayed awake all night to watch the sparking of the day,
Saw darkness softly fading into lighter shades of grey.
Stonehenge stood before us as the first touch of the sun
Eased the chill and whispered that our new lives had begun.
And even though I was only seventeen,
Some magic in the solstice seemed to wash my spirit clean,
And every breath I took I was breathing life anew.
There was magic in that solstice as the sun was breaking through.

Our backs were to the embers. We were facing the unknown.
We may have been together, but we faced it all alone.
Struck dumb, we watched the sun disperse the mist across the plain
And swore our lives would never, ever be the same again.
And even though we were only seventeen,
And thought weíd shared a vision that the ancients must have seen,
A panoply of futures came streaming from the blue,
With magic in the choices and the chances to renew.

When life is not worth living
And Iím prompted to complain,
When I feel my spirit
Can no longer take the strain,
When I canít see the sun because
Iím blinded by the rain,
That solstice seems to find me
It reaches out to find me
It reaches out to find me
And Iím seventeen
Again.

I was changed forever more than thirty years ago.
I never lost the wonder of the boy of who stood alone,
Enraptured by a sunrise and the beauty of the stones.
Thereís magic in each sunrise and it feels like coming home.

When life is not worth living
And Iím prompted to complain,
When I feel my spirit
Can no longer take the strain,
When I canít see the sun because
Iím blinded by the rain,
It reaches out to find me
It reaches out to find me
It reaches out to find me
And Iím seventeen
Again.



Wow, now THIS is sheer brilliance in a bottle, lyrically. I can't listen to the recording this very moment, but the lyric is incredible. If there's an updated version of the demo I would love to listen to it, Alistair. If not, I think you oughta repost this in the Artists Cafe to show it off. THIS is one of those works that SHOULD be shown off. Again, wow...

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